This story is very good. And I like the way it's written. It has an original plot line. It's muy caliente. It's culturally mixed. And did I mention that it's muy caliente?
You shouldn't be hung up too much on whether or not your writing sucks. As writers, we all have moments when we don't think our stuff is good enough for someone to want to continue reading it. We might get hung up reading a fellow author's stories and wish that ours could flow like theirs, or wish that we could have conveyed that same emotion like they were able to. But all that's a matter of writing style...And we all have our own unique styles...Which makes the diversity here so great.
Unfortunately, we are our own worst critics when it comes to our own writings and it takes being a "feedback whore" to give us that extra push we need to keep going sometimes. lol
But if you enjoy writing...Then just keep writing. Feedback or not (although feedback is definitely my crack lol). If at the end of the day just one person likes your work then you have achieved something. If you can make us see what your imagination sees...If you can make us feel what your characters are feeling...If you can trasnport us from the front of our computer screens into the middle of your story like we are actually there? Then that's all you need to know that your writing is good enough to continue.
I will stop babbling LOL...That was my long drawn out way of basically telling you that you are a good writer and to not worry so much and continue to do what you love to do. =D
Author's Response: After the day I am having, you don't believe how much I needed that... thank you. Next chapter is for you....
Favorite Line:
"I came so hard, I was grunting and whimpering and basically bitching up. I almost started crying and sucking my damn thumb it was so good."
Really enjoying this so far... I'm praying that you update soon!
Author's Response: Damnit, your about to make me attempt to write something....lol. I love this story but I think my writing sucks...lol so I haven't wanted to update.
Author's Response: Awww... thanks!! The next chapter is already half way finished. I'm just trying to think of a good time to put it up once its finished. Writing at work seems to be good for me..lol.
Author's Response: LOL... I'm glad you remember this story and I am already half way through the next chapter.... it should be up within the next week I'm guessing.
Author's Response: thanx! I was worried about the writing being not good enough but I'm so glad you like it.
Author's Response: I was thinking about this story yesterday and how I want to finish it but I honestly don't know where I'm going with it. I need to sit down and think of what I want to do with it. But I will be updating it soon hopefully. I want it to work so I'm going to try!! Thanks so much for the review!
OMG! This story is so hot. So original! Update soon. Please please...
Also, if you need help with the spanish, let me know... Im a native speaker. But you are doing real good with it =)
Author's Response: I would love to have a little help with the spanish for the next couple of chapters....my aim is dreamsembraced if you can help me out
Author's Response: thank you, I was wondering if I got it right...
Hey,
I love this story already. It's sexy as hell and I do love me some sexy...lol...
please update.
Leake
Author's Response: I love me some sexy stories too girlie, so I'm glad this falls into the category.
Author's Response: ty..so much. I'm so nervous about this.
Author's Response: glad you liked it...I was nervous about writing it.
