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Of COURSE I think she should move. it just seems like a natural curve to the story, but you know they always say women should never move for a man and I think that's Melissa's main point, though I forgot to say that. That's why she's so adamant that everything else has to work out in order for her to move-- she can just become a live in stay at home grilfriend. She'd never be happy. At the same time, yep I see JC's side too, and that it's not that she's moving, it's that she's making a huge decision that changes his life too without his knowledge or input. This chapter was kind of based on a couple of friends of mine with the same issue-- he felt emasculated when she left him out of the decision, and I wanted to use that emotionbut still retain some of JC's laid backness---- is that a word??? :-D
Anyhoo, thanks for the review! I'm glad a few people are still reading it!
So this chapter has been posted FOREVER and it has taken me almost as long to read it. As an adoptee I have found this story refreshing and truthful. This chapter was almost surreal for me to read. Personally I have run scenarios of what it would be like to meet any one of my birth parents through my head countless times. The meeting between Serena and her father is one of my ideal situations. A parent that did not know you existed, but is happy to know you are and willing to forge some sort of awkward relationship. Even if this situation would be my ideal, your writing made it seem perfectly realistic. If that makes any sense at all…? I am also glad that Serena had JC to lean on. I could not imagine going through this emotional meeting without someone to support me. Anyways, after this deep heartfelt chapter, I am ready to get back to some Chasez sex.
Author's Response: Hey! thanks for your reivew! I was pretty proud of this chapter, I thought it came out really well. Thanks for your comments about the adoption experience-- I tried to do a lot of reading about people meeting their brith parents and capture the emotion behind it. I'm happy it came out realistic and believeable without being cheesy. Thanks for your review!
Oh. My. God.
ok first.... EEEEEP YOU UPDATED! I needed this short vacay to JC Land so bad today omg! so thank you thank you thank you!
now let me start by praying, because I want to wake up to JC snoring in my ear damn it! LOL!
what a damn emotional roller coaster! and I'm going to try and babble as long as time permits but first let's talk about JC's drama moment! ok at first I was like "OMG CHILLAX JC" but the more he kept at it the more I was catching on and i felt all Scooby Smart that I figured he was mad because they're an "us" now and he doest like for her to keep things bc of what happened before... not that he didnt not want her in LA... before he actually said it.
OMG THE BAG!
you know I totally get where they each were coming from... but i'm so on her side here. i think its bc i've dated a guy with more income than me who WAS flashy that i'm all turned off by the whole thing. not that JC's flashy but i like his cheap-ass ok? lol! and deduct more points for it being some type of way for him to make her happy after the LA talk. booo!
OMG LA! He's soooooo cute with all the "you can live with me" talk! omg! *squeeze* I love him!
I want her in LA! Now! Yes!
Author's Response: Lol. Your reviiews are always so great! I struggled alot with this chapter, I don't know how obvious it is, but it is to me. I haven't had much inspiration lately but I'm happy I finished it-- I just wanted it DONE! - and I can move on, when the feeling strikes again. May be awhile before I update again. It's hard to write when you don't feel it, and fanfiction needs a muse, you know? But yes, all the important elements that I was trying to bring out seem to have shown up. \o/
*sigh* I love them.
He's just so cute with making sure she's having a good time, "did you like this"... "did you like that", its just... GUH! he's awesome! and the earings! awwwww! stop! I want diamonds for my bday tooooo!
and i love your attention to detail... how he folded the scarf when he took it off. I totally remember him doing that at the airport when we got those pics and scary paparazzi video.... lol!
poor Serena. I don't envy that elephant in her brain at all. I get what Melissa and Jen were saying and all... it does seem like JC is her number one reason for moving out there and I'm not saying thats bad... she just needs to find out if they're on the same page and all and I think they are. He loves her... *swoon*. :)
more nyc next! yay!
Author's Response: LOL, Yeah I totally agree with her needing to consider *everything*-- but she's also asking ALL THE WRONG PEOPLE what she should do. ;) More on that in the next chapter. *eep*
Author's Response: Me too! :-D Sorry it took me so long to respond, I just noticed this was here! I have a new chapter posted.............getting.......closer!!!
Srsly! The awesomeness of this story is just... OMG! I can't even think clearly right now, my brain is just screaming "more more! i want more!" which then leaves me rereading the chapter just to shut it up! lol!
ok so let me just gush over some fav lines first...
Her voice was gritty, gravelly, something I imagined JC found sexy. I had my eye on her.
It wasn't that I was jealous, and I trusted him-I just didn't trust anyone else.
LMAO! OMG I love her!
OK JC ... OMGZ! I love him, its just freakin adorable how he's planned this and that because he loves her and wants to make memories *dies* and its just GUH I LOVE HIM!
I would have totally been Serena at that pottery store though LOL! But make a Swayze-Ghost moment there and been like "So why dont you come sit behind me to help and sing Unchained Melody in my ear" LOL!
The dance studio. Tina. Serena is so cute! Really! JC totally nailed that on the head... lol! But JC's old whoring ways are no secret ok? I'd be giving every damn chick that looks at him the stink eye... "bish this is MY man!"
And the club? Srsly JC, COME ON! Points for Lance but he should know her better... but hey, I got to read this out of it and srsly fav line EVER!
"Well, yeah. But besides that. I'll remember all those times we sat on the couch and watched fucking Top Chef Marathons, and Intervention and Star Wars and all your science shows. I'll remember laying in bed with you at 3 am while you ramble on and on about something or another, while I'm trying to fall asleep. I'll remember Sunday morning pancakes and arguing over the remote and... yes, all the sex."
and the end! omg you srsly gave me watery yes with JC and his whole I love you more than anything ... OMGZ!*swoon*
I hope shes take that damn business card out and calls! CALL DAMN IT! Move to LA and let JC love her forever and ever and ever and ever!
Author's Response: HAHAHA! Thanks for your awesome review. I had a feeling you would like Tina. :-D Uhm yeah no on the Unchained Melody, mama. LMAO. BUt thanks for the faves, I always wonder what people like. \o/
Her dads reaction to jc was just cute and funny
Author's Response: Oh cool, I'm glad you liked how it turned out. I didn't want to make it TOO dramatic and soap opera-ish. :-D
GAWD! I love them so much!
I loved the whole... "baby, sweetheart, honey, just relax" bit... SO CUTE! and them going down for breakfast, "who knows me here?" and LOL... "You're saying I told you so, in your head. Stop it."
OMG HER GRANDPARENTS!
Seriously picturing My Big Fat Greek Wedding... loved it!
"We eat five courses," he explained, holding up five fingers and counting them down. "First, some ouzo and meze-that is drink and a light snack, some olives, some cheese, some bread. Next, Ana serves a great spanakopita. It's like ambrosia--delicious. Then we have salad, and some soup with orzo pasta, then I made roast beef with lemon potatoes. Sound good?"
DUDE! I'm like starving now! that shit sounds SOOOO good! *drool*
and omg when JC showed up... omg!
Maybe because he was my love interest but also because he ate faster than anyone I knew, inhaling the soup and spanakopita, stabbing miscellaneously at the salad and bread. He was eating everything all out of turn, but I think they were too amused by watching him eat to educate him.
awwwww! LOVE IT!
"Nice for honeymoon," George said to JC with a wink and a nudge.
hehehehehe! :)
and wow... her dad!
that description of Charles at the bar and her making her way over made ME lightheaded! OMG! I wasn't breathing!
and then... LMAO ... him not believing that JC was her boyfriend! Justin! Sexyback! OMFG! I DIED!
I love that everything worked out... *sigh* and she's HAPPY! YAY!
And that JC was there, holding her hand, but not really... you know, being there with her. I love that line she said to her dad... "a big moment for me is a big moment for him" ... awwwwww! I LOVE THEM!
I love this story! but you already know that... so... umm... more soon? yes yes! thank you!
Author's Response: LMAO I love the banter, love coming up with it. It rolls around in my head and I laugh as I write it. I told someone else that in my mind, JC is kind of a sarcastic silly person, doesn't really make a big deal out of anything, real laid back so I like to bring that out. I'm sure he has his serious side, I just don't think that is his core. I think people are far too wrapped up in JC's angst. ANYWAY! ! thanks for your review! I'm glad you're enjoying it! More to come but I haven't even started a new chapter yet. *EEP* [ hides ]
Ok I loved the whole "I can talk about two things at once" conversation. Deer...rabbit. Hillarious. It's nice to see humor in the relationship and not all drama. It's more realistic. Good job can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter.
Author's Response: LMAO, sometimes in my mind, JC is a sarcastic, hilarious fool. I like to bring that out every once in while. I'm glad it worked. Thanks!:-D
Author's Response: Thanks! The rewrite worked tons better for me.
Author's Response: I thought so, thanks! :-D
GUH! Can I have JC? Pleeeease!
before I start gushing about my undying love for this man, let me go back to Allison and Tyler! ALLISON AND TYLER! Ok that lunch and day after was toooo cute for this not to work out! So yes I'm on the cheering squad for those two! yay! :)
and I have no clue why, maybe too much coffee? but I found the whole "key to the P.O box" thing WAY hilarious! lol!
srsly...
"Not like you do. They don't turn out as good as yours. Think of it as a perfect expression of your love for me."
LOL! I love him... I love him! I love him!
and OMGZ... him kissing her and then asking her if she wants him to go to Denver with her! my bf does the same shit when he doesnt want me to say no to something! ugh it drives me crazy because it really does work! and shit... if its coming from JC? *dies*
"So am I. But we have go look at stuff." He wagged his head and that cute way I loved and mumbled as he checked his pocket for his wallet and his phone. "You have a keycard, right? I already lost mine, I think."
its SO cute! i love it too! and omg he would so lose his keycard... *swoon* I love this story!
and I need to just say... I LOVE that he went to Denver with her! that car ride was just... GUH! srsly my love for this story is borderline unhealthy.
but awwwww the whole daddy talk make me sad! i wanted to give him a hug so badly! but its so great that they have each other you know? cause she knows exactly how he feels and where he's coming from because they share that and she makes him feel better and just... its awesome.
and then! OMGZ! He said it! HE SAID IT! And it was ... perfect! I'm so happy I'm alone right now cause I literally raised my arms and said "YES!" like the nerd that I am! lol!
I love seeing them away from LA and being normal... but damn, I'm scared if/when TMZ & Co. does come around! I love the cutesy, flirty, fun... and I'm so scared that'll go right out the door when his celebrity comes around. :(
Author's Response: First, LOVE seeing your perspective. Keep it coming. The whole Tyler and Allison thing has been rolling around in my head for awhile. That relationship serves a purpose-- It'll come into play later. *sneakysneak grin* I thought it turned out REALLY cute how they were just drawn together. I also thought the car ride was cute. I love how things just happen and then I read back and go 'oh, so we're going there? Okay!' I hadn't planned for him to say it until futher along but it just seemed like a really good moment, so I used it. I think it worked and I like that t wasn't mushy and swoony, just matter of fact. Some research for the next chapter and some things are coming up that I am kind of excited about. *eep*
Very beatifful chapter. Please update quick
Author's Response: Thank you! Working on it, I need to do some research for the next chapter. Have to do it right!
Author's Response: Yay!
He said it!!! I am soooo glad that he said it! God and I thought I was alreayd head over heels in love with this JC, but I fell even harder after reading that. Too cute.
But now the meeting of the birth father is coming up. That makes me nervous. Or I guess anxious is a better term.
Author's Response: Thanks, I so appreciate your comments! I'm kind of nervous, too, Now that I think about it, lol.
