not a very exciting chapter? seriously?! damn girl!
“No promises,” growled a voice thick with sleep and gravelly and so sexy it made me wish I’d taken the day off.
amen. i have little to no will power so I probably would've... lol!
but then again, if she did, we would've have gotten the AWESOME news! OMG! but like she said, we totally saw it coming, and would've been surprised if she didn't get it. but still... I did a little "woo hoo" at that.
Love Melissa btw ... “Boy is into you. Big time. BIG. TIME.”
yes he is.
I love how he spent his day being Handy Mandy, fixing this and fixing that.
“I need to clean up, but I’m done. You want to check it? Make sure I didn’t break it?” His face held a boyish, teasing expression that I secretly loved to see but rarely reacted to.
awwwwwww! You know... my bathroom sink keeps dripping, can I borrow him? lol!
but I'd be pissed if he rearranged my dvds and cds... they're organized by genre dude. pssh... alphabetized!
and I love when he was like all, "I wouldn't have taken advantage of you" ... damn! i so would've jumped across the table at that moment. its not the most romantic thing ever said but i think it makes your heart swell all the same.
i enjoyed seeing how her therapy works too, and three cheers for the no-more-woe-is-me decision.
and Regina! Holy shit! Regina!
how could you say this wasnt an exciting chapter? she found out her grandparents and father do exist and that they want to meet her! OMG! and hearing everything from Regina's point of view was just... wow. I never would've thought her story was anything like that.
I loved this chapter... so much development for our little Serena. Loved it!! :)
Author's Response:
Ah, I love your reviews! Lol. I think I just get so used to reading it that I think people will think it's boring.The story has to be told, though, so pushing through. The next few chapters should have more JC in them.
I think everyone needs a handy man like JC but uh.......I don't think he really did anything under there. ; ) He just looked cute.
I did enjoy giving her the smackdown in therapy-- and let her realize that she needed to just stfu, it wasn't only about HER.
*eep*
Author's Response: Oh really!!! Wow, thanks for sharing.. I hope I am capturing the moment and the emotions in a good way....
Author's Response:
Thank you, SO much. I really appreciate your kind words. I feel like there is a story to tell, here, so I'm taking my time with it, but I think my next piece of work is going to be original fiction. I just need to figure out what the next story is that needs to be told.
Thank you, again, so much! :-D
You are a very talented writer. The entire chapter is well written but the whole scene with Regina was very well played out.
"While others walked around laughing and joking and talking, pieces of my life were floating around that table, looking for a spot to settle, to fall into place."
This is a true gem of a sentence. Just a few words to sum up an entire whirlwind of emotions. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! :D
LOL! I didnt even notice the last two chapters werent named.... its usually goes like this: OMG AN UPDATE! *click click click*
sooooo I loved the supermarket scene. hehehe... how he confessed he used to whore it out in maimi, lol! but bb was good this year, he's got a girlfriend now. :)
and I laughed my ass off at this ...
“Be careful, sweetie. I don’t want my love life all over everywhere. My techniques getting out.”
OMG! LOL! heissohotilovehim!
the whole friends party was great, i liked seeing Mr. Social Butterfly at work. and it was so cute how nervous he got meeting her brothers... lol! though he handled it pretty well, better than expected!
then OMG Regina! that was... really moving. i felt the shift and ... yeah.... wow. but it was good! really good! it was great to actually put a face to the name, well, you know what i mean!
but then she got totally wasted! and that sucked. that sucked so hard. but its good! you know... to see her flaws come out and the damage her shitty mom has caused her. and JC got to play nurse.... and that's always good. :)
and awwwwwww! she spilled the L word!! LOL! when I caught that i was like OHSHIT! but JC was just *sigh* so great about it. I love him. I love love love him.
more soon! you know this story is my crack!
oh and btw... "PMS" means "post more soon", get with lingo girl! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the lingo help, LMAO.I am sssslllooowww...
Thanks for your thoughts, always appreciated!!! I know no one expected to see Regina... I was just waiting for a perfect time to toss her in and then I was like...yeah... right here, just when she was nice and happy and everything was going great. BOOM. I totally wanted those 'GASP!' moments and I think I got them.
And yeah, the drunk scene-- I knew she was going to totally fall apart, and try to run from Regina-- and all her issues start to come out when the alcohol removes the filter. *sigh* That was great to write, had fun with that.
I had to think about how he would react to it, the L word-- if he'd be freaked out by it or just let it go-- it's too soon and she was drunk and DAMN!!! Drama. He couldl totally run, here, or he could just roll with it.
There's def something 'different' here, now. so bringing that out, slowly, without it turning into a fairy tale (cause Lawd knows the girl got some stuff to work out and this is not gonna be easy for either of them) is a challenge.
Fun, though. i am constantly running scenarios through my head, lol.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! What does PMS mean? :-D
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! Appreciate your thoughts! :)
*squeal* ... OMG this chapter was just all kinds of cute!
i loved how she predicted his call on Christmas night, already learning him, awww!
and how excited and flustered she was about him coming, her shyness at the airport! lol! that'd SO be me! and then he was all like "you can kiss me now" in the car... GAWD! i would've raped him in the backseat... LOL!
thank you btw for making this NC-17 ... so damn hot!
but awwwwwww .... she cried! and i love how JC was all worried and didnt get freaked. he's just... I love him!
they were just so normal! its great to see that, dinner, talk, tv, cookies... just normal and enjoying each other.
and I love that gap JC Chasez! leave your teeth alone! lol!
i want more! now! :)
Author's Response:
LOl. you're awesome for my ego! Yes I am still awake, but was getting ready to snuggle down. I had an idea for the next chapter and wanted to start on it.;)
You know, I'm not 'in love' with this chapter. It's rather lackluster and I didn't really 'wow' myself. I guess it's probably from reading it so many times and fretting over how I want the story to come out, but I'm really happy that the things I am thinking about and what I am trying to accomplish is coming through- setting the pace, relationship building, getting to know one another. I've struggled with the sex scenes but I really feel like they do so much random 'relating' during them -- and seriously when you dont' see your man for weeks at a time, what's the first thing ya'll are doing? Right? So... in the end I left it because I needed some very close moments in there. Intimacy and ease with eacht other, etc.
Blah blah, yap yap all about me. LOL. Anyway!
Thanks for your review, I always appreciate what you have to say!
ok... give me a moment to reflect here. good gracious.
that was so good! from the moment she was talking to that girl on the plane, who's ex lived in Atlanta and how it went to shit.... you had me scared. I was like "noooo! I want this trip to be happy!" lol!
so thank you thank you thank you! I loved how she was all nervous to meet Tyler (wouldnt we all!) and how cute their lunch was. I love the whole dishwasher thing and ... hey! whats up with that! I was waiting for the unloading-the-dishwasher scene with JC... lol! its ok though... I'll live.
ANDOMGFUCKINGGOD! i'm so jealous she gets to have delicious sex with that man. so so so jealous.
but the best part of this update, and i guess her trip out there, was really how close they're becoming. he's really putting effort into opening up and letting her in, showing her "Josh" or "C" or whatever... lol! i like how she calls him Chasez... its cute! :) ... but i loved when he showed her the album, i dunno... that felt big to me. their talking was great too but pictures... they like, make things real you know?
i love his bossyness! was he extra bossy or was I just really picking up on it? but damn its sexy! and i laughed when he was messing with her at the diner, lol! he's so bad! but i liked how you broke down schizo and kate. man i hope things work out for im in ny... but i'm not getting my hopes up. *sigh*
and i dont know how she was able to control herself at the studio.... seeing JC work has to be like an aphrodisiac or something! lol! It would've taken A LOT for me to just sit and behave.
ok I think I'm done... sorry about the novel but hey, its all your fault anyway. :)
Author's Response:
Girl, don't ever hold back! I appreciate hearing your thoughts, because I'm not the one reading it for the first time.
Yes he was extra bossy:-), but I kind of remembered a lot of interviews where he 'took charge' and they kind of looked to him for the 'go'. Plus he always said 'I'm not bossy. I just like order', which tells me people think he's bossy but he doesn't think he is. I just think it's cute how she keeps telling him he's bossy and it just rolls off his back-- he's likely used to it. In my head.
Allison was a little bit of foreshadowiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnggggggggg but it doesn't have anything to do with JC and Serena, not really. She'll be back, later. *eep*
Yes, I thought the photo album would be a BIG way to let her in a little bit and show her some things without her having to ask. I couldn't think of a funny way to work the dishwasher unloading and make it funny and quirky so I just decided to allude to it and let it go. We get it, JC is obsessed with order. I dont want it to turn into a comedy, just cute little quirks that make him endearing.
Glad you like the updates. More to come! She's got a lot to work through and there's a lot of stuff coming up. Exciting! I wish it could write itself. ': |
Loved every single one of them. Im glad he's opening up to her as well and not just her being the open 1
Author's Response: It was just 2 chapters but I had to cut them because tehy were too long, lol. Thanks for the review! Yeah I think him showing her what he wants her to know is a great step forward. more to come!
I just want to say that I absolutely love this story. Love, love, love, love. :-D
For as long as I can remember, I was stricty a JC girl, but around '04 I started privately cheating on him with Justin lol (publicly in '06) and I've always felt horribly about that.
This story right here is reconverting me, I think. I ADORE it completely (more than a lot of Justin fanfics I'm currently reading). Please continue the amazing job you're doing. This is an awesome story.
~N~
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! That's so nice to hear! Variety is the spice of life-- it's okay to dabble! ;-) Thanks for your great review, it's very inspiring. More to come!
awwwww! I loved their whole "I'm sorry!" ... "I'm sorry more!" moment, lol!
so glad they got some talking done ... talking that needed to be talked about. Its easy to understand where they both are coming from... hopefully they keep how the other person feels in mind.
they're just so perfect together... *sigh* I don't ever want it to end. LA here we come! :)
Author's Response: Well it's about time! I was like, where's vikki, dammit? I need my critical reviews! *snort* I'm just kidding, thanks for reading. It had to be said, so they could go in a direction. Yes yes, LA here we come!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing...we just have to let the story unfold and tell itself, I guess. :D
Loving the story girl
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D
