...and now I want to go to Greece even more than I did before! Too bad I can't go with JC like Serena gets to. lol. This chapter was awesome. I can feel them getting closer and I hope this is finally going to give Serena the confidence and assurance she needs to accept JC's proposal. Can't wait for day 2!!
Author's Response: Ugh the research is just killing me! It's so hard trying to decribe the beauty, but I'm trying! I'm very proud of my female MC, She's not nearly as crazy as before and she's starting to grasp that this thing might be for real.
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Yep, Melissa is always very good for Serena. We all need someone who isn't afraid to offend us.
You're like my guru in relationships topics right now.
They've been through so much, and conquer all those barriers, I just love them!
Author's Response: Me too. They've definitely been my pet project. Thanks for reading!
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:D Thanks! They are finally on a good path.
Author's Response: Awww, thanks! :D Truthfully, I read old chapters a lot, to help keep the story fresh in my mind and keep things straight. I get things like names wrong but events and outcomes I remember because I've read it so much!
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Sometimes she does the right thing. Sometimes. I'm eager to get them back to lovey and cute, now that they're past such a huge hurdle. But JC still has some things up his sleeve, so she's not exactly getting away scot free.
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Yeah hopefully I will finish before I hit the 2 year mark on writing this story. It's been dragged out WAY too long.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I really appreciate that you've read it and commented!
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He's definitely not going to let her off easy. If I were him I wouldn't take her back unless she could prove she was a changed person.
I tried to make the span of time stretch but it's hard in writing. It's been ~ 3 weeks or so. Long enough to make an impact but not so long that it seems ridiculous to even try.
Author's Response: Thanks for a wonderful review. LOVE when people "get it".... writing more very soon!
Author's Response: UH HUH! The next chapter should be fun to write. CRAWL, honey.
I think you already know my absolute fascination with your writing, your story, and your characters. This was just another example of your brillance. It is beyond all that I can aspire to be. The previous chapter, I felt this anger towards Serena that I longed to reach through the computer screen, the web, and her own laptop and strangle the poor broad.
This chapter, however, caused me sympathy. Because, well, there is no nice or gentle way to put it, she is fucked up. The one person that she most trusts and loves is the sole person that has failed her time and time again. And, it does not matter to her that everyone else in her life has done right by her. It does not matter because the one person that she longed to be loved, protected, and cared by didn't.
There were so many quotes from this chapter that jumped out at me, that I could probably dissect every line. But, I shall not.
"Stop, Serena! Just fucking stop." I found my own brain screaming the same thing out as I was reading this chapter and several others. But, what was more striking about this was that I heard myself substituting my name for Serena's. You, with your talent of storytelling, opened my eyes. Lately, my life's been in turmoil and today, reading this, I realized that I am the root of my problem. If I would just simply stop, I could see the light.
This was different. He wasn't coming after me. This saddest of the realities that a fool in love can see.
"Serena...think about it? You really should." This actually made me laugh. Serena thinks too much. I doubt Allegra meant it in a bad way. I believe she wholeheartedly wants Serena and JC to work out. But, her advice delayed Serena's "coming to". Serena doesn't need to think about anything; she needs to feel. She needs to trust her heart.
"You want it your way or not at all." Well, ain't that a bitch? Isn't this what we all are like? We're so consumed by ourselves that we are blinded to others. Tyler's entire spill left me gaping, open-mouthed and all. He truly blew me away - I loved it. I think he was the most important of the advisers to Serena. Why? Well, she's always written him off as a childish, immature, and probably not up to par with her brillance - a kid. And, he proved her wrong. He proved to her that she was wrong.
I clearly didn't know shit. Clearly.
I apologize for my rant, but I just felt inclined to try and show you the product of your talent. And if you decide to skip over everything I type and only read the last line, then I'll make it good:
Thank you.
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Ugh. I almost want to cry. Thank you for such a well thought out review. I love when people get it and see things I never even thought of. This whole story idea came about from JC's adoption and I thought, what if he met someone with the same story and started to see himself in her and it kind of grew its own wings from there and has become something totally different.
Yeah the last chapter... I WANTED people to be mad at Serena. Like spitting nails, mad. Especially, JC because there was so much good she was throwing away by being blind to what was sitting right in front of her. I wanted people to root for her and to mentally cheer her on and beg her to go to him and make things right. I always wanted her to have to go to JC and make things right and in the process, find out a lot about herself.
I'll have to say that Tyler surprised me while I was writing it. Sometimes the chapters just write themselves! I originally had Allison giving her the 'I am woman hear me roar' speech but I think it hit her hard, coming from him.
Thanks so much for a great review! The next chapter will be great!
Okay I just went back and reread the end of this chapter. What the hell cracked in JC? I realize that he is upset about her moving out. And I can totally agree with him on that. I was completely thrown by it and astonished and I'm not the one dating her. But his response seemed very out of character for him. He really went for the jugular with some comments. ""You were totally right, weren't you? When we met, you said you were fucked up. And you are."" He might as well have stabbed her. Probably would have hurt less.
And can I just say that I am almost more upset about Serena's anger over him going out on the road again than her decision to move out. I mean really? She pushed him to go back out there and do the music thing. She was really the driving force behind him doing this tour in the first place. But now she is going to complain that he is going to tour again? I get that she missed him, but come on. Serena is smart, she should have been able to realize that pushing him to do music meant that he would be touring, a lot... and then some.
So I guess this comment means I have to retract my previous comment of "That's all I have to say."
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Ha! Yes i guess you had more to say!
I feel like his reaction has been building for awhile. He's been very patient and accommodating to her and her neurotic behavior, but a man can only take so much. "JC" has had enough, reached the end of his rope. And it had to be enough for Serena to finally get that she's fucking things up all on her own. It isn't so much that she's moving out... it's that her instinct is to run. She thinks this is how to solve the problem, not stay and fight it out. Fight for them. But that'll come out later.. you know... when they make up. *hee*
