Hmmm, I bet i know what Justin saw...
JC with Caesar hair? Mmmmmm
“Excuse me for not being a girl,” JC muttered sarcastically.
“You’d be pretty,” Chris spoke up.
“Yeah, pretty ugly."
That part made me laugh so hard. JC as Marilyn Monroe? Eeeeeeeek! *Fans fangirl self*
It took me long to review this chapter...
I've been super busy lately...
Anyways, I really liked this chappie. I love thunderstorms, sometimes, only when I have someone nearby to hug. It's an excellent excuse... ;)
Off to read next chapter.
Awwww JC is SO smart!!!!
I liked this chapter. Look at the time! It's too late but I can't stop reading!!
I'm too tired. Hey! can I be part of the story? I could be a journalist or something. I could be friends of you when you lived in Canada or something... ^^
Hey does this work?
I'm not sure of how this review thing work, cause I tried it before with un-successful results...
I liked this chapter... OMG Paul? OMG Charlotte? poor dad! and poor Mack if she's to pay the consequences...
I want to read more...
Off to next chapter!
Author's Response: Hahaha, well if Mack is aggressive without alcohol then she would surely be aggressive with it.
Author's Response: Of course he's a creeper. There IS a reason why he wears those dark glasses all of the time, lol. Thanks for the review.
Well you know whose side I'm on in everything but I can't help but find the JustinxMack moments extremely adorable :3 Can't wait until the next one o/
Ps. Spacing was actually okay here. Don't know what you were worried about
I should have known after the last chapter to expect something like this. The groping definitely didn't happen as I would have wanted it to be. But, it does add for drama *u*
Good chapter my dear~ Keep it up 8D
Author's Response: You get your groping in the way I dish it, dear. Be happy. Lol. Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it. The next chapter should be up soon.
I really like how your writing style is improving :) I can totally imagine this happening as a television series. That said, you could tighten it up further by deleting unnecessary details in the narrative. But all in all, good job :)
I will poke thee on email. I never seem to catch you online anymore ;__;
Author's Response: I'm still working on taking out unnecessary details, but I'm not very good at catching it. I hope you still enjoy reading this story. We don't talk much anymore. Dang yo stupid job, lol.
Awww.... I really see the guys being this silly *u* Though I must say I'm not used to reading them before the break-up anymore so~ It took a while for me to get comfortable with their antics.
That aside, I really enjoy seeing some of the guys get attached to Mack. It's all kinds of cute.
Ps. I'm sorry about not being online often ;; I hope to still see you around despite school opening.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chapter. Hope to see you online in the near future.
I think my major beef with this chapter is that it brought the action of the story down for me. I get that it's an important point in the story but it doesn't come across as that to me.
Technically it's all sound; syntax, and grammar are good; the chapter is coherent and cohesive enough. But it still lacks in the manner the narration is created. I can't put into words what exactly but... meh.
Ps. Would you want to talk about your story over AIM? I have questions that I'd rather not address here *u*;
Author's Response:
Now that I re-read this chapter I can see why you think it slowed you down. I had to practically force myself to write this chapter, which is something that I usually try to stop myself from doing.
I'm going to leave it for now but go back and change it later.
