Awwww.
I would have liked to see a little bit more of a struggle, but it was super cute. Glad she finally listened! Yay! Great job, hun!
Author's Response: thanks! :)
That was a great short. When I read the description, I thought the story was a longer one and that you had just started it. I was surprised to see only two chapters and that it was complete, because I think it has potential to be a longer story.
It was a great story and you wrote it wonderfully. :)
Author's Response: thank you! this was my first fiction ever writtin or posted so thank you for the review :)