Comments For Pleasant Fiction?
a_moments_grace (Signed) on Aug 20, 2011 11:23 am (Pleasant Fiction?)
I thought you did really well. For a first time, there was some great scenes and vivid details. I had a little trouble understanding the story line at times, but if you space it out a little, it might be easier to follow. I think this would make an awesome longer story, too, just to learn more about these two. Great start! I can't wait to see what else you come up with!
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest words. I think my explanation of the story is visible to you in my response to another review. If not, let me know and I will explain further.
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest words. I think my explanation of the story is visible to you in my response to another review. If not, let me know and I will explain further.
JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Aug 19, 2011 03:26 pm (Pleasant Fiction?)
So I saw that you were new, and I decided to give this one-shot a go. Welcome to the wonderful world on NSYNC Fiction! haha Needless to say, the story was nice :)) In all honesty, I had a little trouble following the storyline. But it was about music, not so? Okay, and just a tip, try writing the document by using spaces in between sentences because sometimes if you don't, it makes it harder for the reader to follow through. I do want to say though, that I love your vocablary. Some of the words/phrases you used to decribe actions/setting was great! The romance aspect of it coming toward the end was nice as well. You should take it and maybe try continuing the storyline and make it a longer story. Oh! And my favorite line: "Sh. I just helped bring it out. At its core, it's all you." Great line and it's true. So, good one shot, maybe it could use some tweaking here and there but I already gave my opinion. But I liked it :)) I see potential for a long story out of the romance aspect of it.
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest words. The point of the story is that they are filming a scene in a movie about music. That's why, they never really say eachothers' names until the end after the director said "cut" and they use their real names. The narrator has a real life crush on her co-star and the reader may see subtle evidence that he feels the same. They're actually singing the songs they wrote on the soundtrack instead of using "stunt voices" so there's also the narrator's blossoming music career guided by Justin. It's sort of a parallel between the movie and her life. Just to clarify a few questions you had. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest words. The point of the story is that they are filming a scene in a movie about music. That's why, they never really say eachothers' names until the end after the director said "cut" and they use their real names. The narrator has a real life crush on her co-star and the reader may see subtle evidence that he feels the same. They're actually singing the songs they wrote on the soundtrack instead of using "stunt voices" so there's also the narrator's blossoming music career guided by Justin. It's sort of a parallel between the movie and her life. Just to clarify a few questions you had. :)
