Comments For One Night
a_moments_grace (Signed) on Aug 24, 2011 04:24 pm (Chapter 3)
Phew! It's a great start, and I love baby stories :) but I was really difficult to follow. Spacing and punctuation would really help the flow of this, and people would be able to follow along much easier. If you need help, don't hesitate to ask! Welcome to the site!
dani86 (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 04:01 pm (Chapter 1)
ooooo plz keep this story up its great
Jersey_tenn (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 12:25 pm (Chapter 1)
Good post...i just have a suggestion. Work on your punctuation, and breaking up the paragraph. It was a bit difficult to follow because I couldn't tell what was dialogue and what was description. We like to serve as betas if you need help! Congrats on your first post!
Lershmer (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 11:46 am (Chapter 1)
It's a good story, but work on the puncuation. It was hard for me to follow since I couldn't tell when they started talking and whatnot. Keep it up though
Ashlyn (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 10:24 am (Chapter 3)
You should def. keep this story going bc I'd love to see what happens. Great story sooo far!!! :-)
