Comments For Long Lost Sister
AngelEyes81 (Signed) on Mar 18, 2012 10:54 pm (Chapter 38)

Great Story i really liked this... Interesting idea of a long lost sister 

:D 



Author's Response: Thanks, this was actually my first long chapter story, the rest as you can see are one shots.. :) But some members after it was finished, were thinking of a sequel, which is why I continued it..however, thanks for the review.. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)


Ashley Loves JC (Signed) on Feb 26, 2012 08:14 pm (Chapter 24)
I can say picture Tyler in Spiderman pajama pants!

Author's Response: LOLZ! :P


Mack (Anonymous) on Feb 26, 2012 10:31 am (Chapter 38)

Okay! I finally sat myself down and read this entire story in one go. I'm so glad your chapters weren't too long, haha.

Okay, just a few things I want to say. A few times you put your quotation marks in the middle of a sentence when someone was still speaking and a couple of times you didn't have them when someone was still speaking. You might want to go back and fix that. Also a couple of times your punctuation was missing or a puncuation mark was added when not needed, such as a period next to a question mark. One more thing, each time a new person speaks it's best to press enter and create a new line instead of shoving the sentences right next to each other.

Now, onto the review part. I liked the idea of the story. The plot was a good one. A couple of parts weren't believable but it's okay because I have a sense of suspended belief whenever I read a story so it was easy to pass over. I wish the story had more scenes with ABDC instead of just focusing on Tiffani and JC. Maybe add a bit more drama in it. I hope you don't see this as flat out criticism, it's just constructive.

The story was a good read. Great job. =)



Author's Response: YOU FINALLY READ IT! LOL! Yeah since this was my first long chapters story, I had some bits and pieces that were probably missing, and I couldn't really focus on ABDC all that much, cause the story revolved around JC and Tiffani, and all that jazz..lolz I also added friendship and crazy ex girlfriend in there as well..hahaha But yay! I'm glad that you enjoyed the story and reviewed..Now you should update YOURS whenever you have the time.. *batseyelashes*


AngelEyes81 (Signed) on Jan 13, 2012 07:44 pm (Chapter 38)
Great Story... I really enjoyed it and now I can go back to the follow-up that I came across first! 


Ashley Loves JC (Signed) on Nov 11, 2011 09:17 pm (Chapter 23)
Awww! JC teaching Tiffani how to ride the moped was such a cute brother and sister moment! And I love how you used the "I have to save... because yes!" quote!


Ashley Loves JC (Signed) on Nov 10, 2011 09:57 pm (Chapter 22)
Oh my gosh! I can't believe they found their mother, I was definitely not expecting that. It's so sad that she died, I was kinding of hoping that they would reunite with her. At least JC and Tiffani found each other, and that probably answered a lot of their questions.  


Ashley Loves JC (Signed) on Oct 22, 2011 12:21 am (Chapter 21)
What? JC cooking? And he didn't burn the house down? It's a miracle! Awww, I'm so proud of him! Okay, anyway, I loved the beginning when Tiffani is sleeping, and JC kisses her on her forehead, and tucks her in! So sweet! And riding on the back of JC's moped seems like fun! 

Author's Response: I know right? It would be fun to ride the back of JC's moped.. :) And yeah I'm proud of him too..lolz


Ashley Loves JC (Signed) on Oct 10, 2011 04:38 pm (Chapter 20)
Awww! It's really great to see Tiffani spending time with the Chasez's!

Author's Response: Yes it is.. :)


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Oct 02, 2011 10:37 pm (Chapter 38)
Awww I lovedd this!!! Gosh it was soo sweet, this whole scene! :)) haha Yea Tiff, try to turn Lance straight :P OMG JC, I know you can make Anna feel better. hehe ;) This was really sweet. Nice job Steph! *hugs* I'm actually a little sad to see that you ended it but it was a good read while it lasted. :)) I've now fallen in love with sibling JC. 

Author's Response: Yeah she might turn Lance straight..HA!  Awww.dont be sad, I had to end it, I couldn't figure out any more scenes..lolz But Im glad you enjoyed the story, yes I love sibling JC too, Adorable! AWWS! Thank you soooo much for reading and reviewing.. *hugs back* :D


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Oct 02, 2011 10:33 pm (Chapter 37)
Ohh they won! ;) That was sweet. hahaha Yes! Even JC stood up! haha Oh JC... But congrats to Moonlight Shadow!! :D 

Author's Response: Yes they did! :D It was so exciting..lolz


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Oct 02, 2011 10:30 pm (Chapter 36)
Dear God, he probably does smell really good... Ah!! :P :D haha Oh I could just picture JC's reaction to watching a crew on ABDC dance to Pop. I wish they'd have an *NSYNC episode... *goes on to next chapter*

Author's Response: I know right? He must smell soo wonderful! AHHH! :D And yes they MUST do an *NSYNC episode or something..lolz


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Sep 30, 2011 04:46 pm (Chapter 35)
Made me think back to the time where Massive Monkeys did Tearin' Up My Heart on ABDC and another episode where ByeByeBye was in one of the remixed songs all the crews had to do. *sigh* I miss seeing JC dance... and sing... I miss *NSYNC. Ahem, okay my review... LOL Ahh JC's hair did look amazing in that Pop video. He got groped by all those girls! aha "No, she has wild fantasies about me." I literally laughed out loud at that line! Oh Brian :P Nice job :)) Enjoying these updates!

Author's Response: Ahh yes Brian, I actually had a friend like that when I was HS, (he joined the army after and was there for 3yrs, so he's back home now so yay lolz) and he acted the same way, so yeah, character is similar...lolz and YES Massive Monkeys when they performed TUMH, so awesome. :D I know, I miss all that fun stuff they used to do too... *pouts* which is why I listen to their songs and watch videos of them from time to time, they keep me sane..lolz Im stuck living in the 90s and 00s..Anywho, thanks for reading and reviewing. Glad your enjoying the story, I'll update the next chapter soon.. :)


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Sep 30, 2011 04:41 pm (Chapter 34)
I so loved this chap! :D omg YES! JC is always writing something down... haha The other judges just smile and clap and stand up and cheer and he's just there, sitting, all serious and scribbling whatever he's thinking in that head of his. Gah I love him! Okay, back to the story... hehe I'm glad Moonlight Shadow did a great job and the judges liked 'em. I also really like the fact that the audience doesn't know that Tiff & JC are siblings. Oh! The VMA Flashback Challenge where they're gonna use an *NSYNC song!!! And they made it to the next show!! Awesome! *next chapter*

Author's Response: Thank you! :D I'm so glad you loved it! YES! JC's always writing something, and I also like the pen throw where he just throws the pen on the table after he speaks..lolz And no the audience doesn't know, its better that way. :)


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Sep 28, 2011 03:17 pm (Chapter 33)
Ohhh Nice update!! Ahh I would soo value JC Chasez's autograph over Mario Lopez's... Honestly, I would. :D I wonder if JC is going to be at all biased when he's judging Moonlight Shadow because his sister is in that group... Hmm... Really wanna read more! Soon! :))

Author's Response: Thankies! :D *hugs* Ahh yes, I would too..tee hee! Oh yes he's gonna be so giddy about it.. lolz! I'm glad your enjoying the story..


JSC_OutOfSync (Signed) on Sep 26, 2011 07:38 pm (Chapter 32)
Aww things got better! I'm glad :)) Can't wait to see how the competition goes for Tiff and her crew!! Thanks 4 the update and I hope to see more soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing.. :)




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