You humanize the *NSYNC guys quite nicely here. You prove that they’re capable of doing ridiculous and downright stupid things, too. 

I can totally believe that Justin might have harbored a little resentment toward the other guys just because he was the youngest. (Likewise, Chris likely got his share of flak for being the oldest.)

I also admire how you show JC exercising tact when speaking about Libby. “She's not had many boyfriends. She's bound to take a breakup hard.” I believe that, too. When someone’s a bit of a dud with the opposite sex, they pretty much take what they can get, and a breakup would be very hard on them indeed. Really brings on a pang of pity for Libby. 

Furthermore, you do an excellent job at showing things from various perspectives. On one hand, I totally get why Justin’s so hot and bothered. On the other hand, it’s easy to see how the guy’s asking for trouble when he takes matters into his own hands.

This particular line was solid gold: “He could only imagine how his mother would react if he turned up at the house they shared with a black eye and covered in someone else's blood. He'd probably be hauled back to Tennessee in a heartbeat to face the wrath of his grandparents.” Oh-ho boy, I can only imagine!

Hey, matey, it’s me again. Sorry if I went a little overboard with my writing advice. I guess I sometimes take myself a little too seriously as a writer, and I can forget that not all writers have the same passion I have, that some write purely for kicks. Besides, I wanted to give you something a bit more constructive than a simple, “Oh, this is so cool!” or “Nice, hope you update soon!”

That’s the thing about advice: you’re always welcome to take it or leave it. I never force anyone to accept my advice. But I promise I’ll try to watch it and tone it down a few notches, and I’ll consider your proposal of becoming a beta.

As for the chapter, here are some of the highlights:

“The girls were nearly always late for meeting the guys at the club.” Ain’t that always the way, a girl running late for every important date. :P At least we’re fashionably late!

“She'd spend hours examining every item in her wardrobe, debating the perks of wearing this with that, or those pants with that top.” Maybe that’s getting a little too personal. On the other hand, a girl wouldn’t fuss so much if she didn’t care, especially when she’s involved with a guy.

And then there’s Clare and Libby’s relationship. I gotta say, it’s absolutely lovely. If they shared biological ties, I don’t see what difference it would make. There are some fine ladies I consider every bit as much my sisters as the women with whom I share blood. That’s also one of the things about *NSYNC that appeals to me to this day, how they consider each other family and they’re together even when they’re not performing together.

And leave it to Justin to be Libby’s knight in shining armor. I especially admired this line, “He was warm and she felt comforted just by the way his arm was wrapped around her waist.” I swear, I could almost feel the warmth of someone’s arm around my waist, too.

That’s all for the time being, but I’ll be back!

Sorry to have been absent for so long, mate. School was my main priority for the last few months, and as you know, I recently lost my dad and that was very rough. I'm still having a hard time, but I'm finding that writing helps me get stuff off my chest, and I decided if I want more reviews (there's been a bit of a review famine on my side), it's only fair that I deliver some reviews here and there, too.

I was a little surprised that you decided to write this whole thing over again, but I am seeing a great improvement in the quality. Remember to be careful of the length of your sentences AND paragraphs; say what you need to say, don't be too stingy with your words, but don't drown your readers, either. I'm a big believer in leaving some room for personal imagination, so it's not necessary to describe every little thing. And it's also important to show things rather than merely telling them like they are. For instance, don't just say that someone's mad or excited or depressed; describe their body language and show it in their dialogue. 

As for your dialogue, it's quite impressive. I'd say it's one of your strongest points. Don't know if I shared this tip with you, but one professor suggested taking some time to read the dialogue out loud to see how natural it sounds.

Keep up the awesome work, matey!