You know, every time I see your title, *NSYNC’s “If I’m Not the One” automatically starts playing in my head. (Not that it’s a bad thing, of course!) It actually took me a while to warm up to that song, and I may warm up to your story soon enough, too.

Sorry if I came off as less-than-enthusiastic earlier. I guess I just feel like there are so many stories about JC and Justin already, and I don’t know yet what makes this story any different. Still, I’ll give you AND your story an honest shot.

JC’s being a real sweetie here. Might be overdoing it a little, but then again, I’d rather have a guy be too nice than too mean. Aside from the dialogue, you also do a superb job with the descriptions. It’s like I’m there, seeing and touching and even tasting for myself.

I found myself laughing when JC said, “Oh, man!  Now you’re condemning both of us to an indefinite stay in hell!” I had no problem at all, imagining such words coming out of his mouth. 

And it went to my heart when he told Cass, “I like you. You seem to like me. We enjoy spending time together doing inane things like watching South Park and other cartoons. But, because I’m some kind of celebrity, we can’t be together. So, when we get discharged, I go back to my ivory tower somewhere and you’ll take your flowers, and memories, and go home to your little sister and just forget about everything we shared for these few brief days. Does that about sum it up?” To that, I can only respond with, “Ouch!” 

And then I just had to go “awww” when he said, “If you won’t call me JC or one of my nicknames, then don’t call me anything.  I will not answer to ‘Mr. Chasez’!”

At the mention of Suzie, I could hear that famous “dun-dun-DUNNNN!” playing, and I had to admire JC’s throwback to Johnny: “Manage my career, not my life.” For some people, it’s next to impossible to know the difference.

As for this Thomas fellow, I reserve judgment for the time being.

I suppose it's only fair I give you more feedback for your story. Besides, I want feedback for my stories, too. Reviews are the fuel that keep the author and the story going. Oh, it's possible to complete a story without any reviews at all, but it's a lot less fun that way. As a writer, you want to know whether your work is any good and where you can make improvements.

Anyhow, this was a cute, endearing chapter, although I think the kiss on the lips was a tad too hasty. I'm a big believer in taking time with a relationship, in taking time to get to know the other person better. That's a slight problem I have with fairy tales and Disney movies, as much as I love 'em. 

Your dialogue is the best, as always. What really jumped out at me was when JC told Johnny, "Johnny, you're my manager, not my father," and when Cass asked later, "Who are you, my mother?"

As cute and tongue-in-cheek as those comments are, it rubs me the wrong way when people get a little too flippant about their parents. My dad died recently, and of course my relationship with him wasn't the most ideal, but I've gained a deeper respect for fathers (and for mothers). Just saying.

I don't like Suzie..she reminds me of that girl from the PopOdyssey Concert.. and I quote: "I thought you were gonna get me some diamond earrings JC.." -_-

So JC is gonna meet her at lunch tomorrow?? It better be a quick lunch..LOL

Now go check on Cassandra JC, she needs you.. :)

I'll read the rest of the chapters soon... 

THAT'S RIGHT! JC is not going anywhere, he's gonna stay there and watch her like a hawk.. :D

Ok, Thomas needs to go away, he said he was sorry, Pssh, please don't give me that crap..it was JC that was there with Cassandra all along at the hospital, not Thomas Wood.. -_- 

But what could be bothering Cassandra, that nightmare she had, there's something going b/tween her ex and her, and that nightmare.

I think Thomas and Suzie should get together instead and leave JC and Cassandra alone in peace..

*reads next chapter* 

Thomas Wood?? What a stupid name..LOL who is he?? And who is Suzie..Suzie needs to stop being a b*tch and calling Johnny every 24/7 checking up on JC..GRRR..

This story is SO good though, its like watching a dramatic Spanish soap opera! HA! :D

Earlier in this chapter, these lines here: Cassandra, beautiful flowers for my beautiful new friend.  Glad we were held captive together.  JC’

AWW! JC you are so sweet, I must read more! *reads next chapter* 

AWWWW! This story is beginning to have SO much SWEETNESS! I LOVE LOVE! :D

Don't know why I laughed so hard at these lines here:  “Are you serious?  JC, what are you up to?”  “Johnny, you’re my manager, not my father.  LOL! Maybe cause I can picture Johnny having a convo with JC about this..haha! 

I also like that Cassandra and JC have such nice chemistry going on between them throughout the story, would read more soon.. :) 

*GASP* Hmm..why does he feel the urge to protect Cassandra...because he is her knight in shining armor! AWW! :D So JC was admitted at the hospital for dehydration and exhaustion just like Cassandra??

I laughed at these lines here though:  Hey guy.  I really miss you.”  He looked at the dark haired man solemnly.  “How much longer do you have to be stuck in this hell-hole?”

“Hopefully not much longer.  I can’t get them to take out this damned I.V.  They claim my blood work still indicates I haven’t been fully hydrated.  What a crock!” 

HA! 

Would read/review more soon..I'm a bit behind on reviewing some stories, but I'm catching up! Looks good! :D