First off... *Wipes off the steam on the screen* Wow o__O
Anyway, before I get carried away back to my intent to leave a review. I know that this is an old story, and I wouldn't have come across it. I'm so glad though that I was able to because I thoroughly enjoyed it. And it's not just because of that steamy hot sex scene that took place. I truly have a high regard for this story that I figured I should stop and give a well-thought out review since it deserves being praised and you deserve commendation for writing this.
Your skill as an author is evident in this story. From the build up of the narrative, to the voice of character whose perspective you've written this in, to the witty dialogue, and the brilliant play of images between the wine, music and actual foreplay, I don't know where to begin. To me they just all come together and make this story work.
The pace of the narration/consciousness of the primary character establishes immediately her personality such that the choice of the drink and music metaphor/analogy/parallel seems like the natural choice to make, thereby everything is coherent and structurally organic. Add to the fact that the pace is set well in the narration itself that the reader feels that she is part of the fact and the narration becomes an actual foreplay, leading up to the eventual climax of the act. It sets it up so you're left wanting, intrigued, interested and not wanting to quit the story.
Finally, I think that a short story form does the idea for the plot justice. Other writers may have and would probably decided to establish this relationship between the two characters in the span of chapters. That idea would work but I don't think that it would be as successful as this short. Everything is wrapped and concluded with the length just right to accomplish all this.
Literary -analysis-diarrhea aside, I really do like this story. And it's got me wanting to read your other works if they would feature the same quality this visual has.
Three thumbs up, if that's possible, and I only regret not reading this sooner. I have a deep respect for your craft and you can count me as a fan of your writing. ^__^
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the time it took to write such a detailed review. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story and hope you get the chance to read more of my work! I got my degrees in literature and rhetoric so I really appreciate all your comments, they help me focus and know the techniques and style that I use is actually working! haha! thanks again and happy reading!
