Comments For Control
Reshaye (Signed) on Mar 30, 2008 11:56 am (Growing Up)
The storyline is great....I can definitely see talent in your writing. My only criticism is that you really need a proofreader. The errors distract from the amazing story. If the story was edited properly it would completely off the chain!!! I'd totally proofread for you if you'd like. Having said all that, your story has really drawn me in and I've been waiting anxiously everyday for a new chapter! = )
Author's Response: i know that I have a major problem with proofing wat i put out, but i just ent through all of the chapters and cleaned them up a bit. But i wouldn't mind having a proof reader from time to time.
Author's Response: i know that I have a major problem with proofing wat i put out, but i just ent through all of the chapters and cleaned them up a bit. But i wouldn't mind having a proof reader from time to time.
ygant (Anonymous) on Mar 30, 2008 09:14 am (Who's in Control?)
I'm lovin it oh so very much. If I don't review from tme to time...no worries, I'm still reading it. Sonrisa.
Author's Response: As long as you reading girl I'm cool.
Author's Response: As long as you reading girl I'm cool.
justinaham (Signed) on Mar 30, 2008 08:19 am (Who's in Control?)
OH GIRL....Sly is a sneaky little fucker, but he wouldn't have had to try and convince me. Lol
jacs12031984 (Signed) on Mar 30, 2008 08:07 am (Who's in Control?)
wow what a turn of events cant wait to see what happens with thier relationship.
MissM69 (Signed) on Mar 30, 2008 12:06 am (Getting What's Mine)
big girl is in trouble can't wait to read what what big daddy J will do next :D
justinaham (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 11:56 pm (Getting What's Mine)
I love it ...she did good droppin him but she better be careful
ygant (Anonymous) on Mar 29, 2008 06:12 pm (Growing Pains)
I'm absolutely lovin this story and the rate at which you update. More, please....great work.
jacs12031984 (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 05:49 pm (Growing Pains)
aww cant wait to see what else develops
rev0586 (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 05:00 pm (Growing Pains)
oh this just is gettin better and better!!
Author's Response: Thanks Hun!!! :")
Author's Response: Thanks Hun!!! :")
MissM69 (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 04:15 pm (Growing Pains)
Damn bastard but even bastard can change I hope :p
Author's Response: I hope so too.
Author's Response: I hope so too.
jacs12031984 (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 10:25 am (When the Bubble is Burst)
loving it cant wait for more... one of best i have read in a while.
Author's Response: thanks, i'll be certain to make sure that it still gets ur attention latr, hopfully.
Author's Response: thanks, i'll be certain to make sure that it still gets ur attention latr, hopfully.
rev0586 (Signed) on Mar 29, 2008 02:39 am (When the Bubble is Burst)
thanks 4 giving me a background on hey they knew each other... oh n i guess r they fuck buddies or bf/gf??
Author's Response: I thought one was needed an i think you for reviewing
Author's Response: I thought one was needed an i think you for reviewing
MissM69 (Signed) on Mar 28, 2008 10:30 pm (When the Bubble is Burst)
I'm liking this story does far you doing great keep it up :)
justinaham (Signed) on Mar 26, 2008 10:12 pm (Mick's Sermon)
Dang her mama is all sorts of mean....lol . Good start
