I really cannot wait until the next story.  To be honest, this story partly inspired my characterization of Justin in the story I just started.

I'm not sure where you're going with it--but I thought--hmm, what would Justin act like if he really did marry the wench that was the wrong person?  Thus, part of the premise in my story.  So thanks for the inspiration :)

God, I really don't want him to marry Amelia. And your characterization of Charlie is just amazing.  Seriously, you are a tremendously talented writer.

If some of your readers are getting bored, it might be in your best interest to throw them for a loop - it's keep them guessing, wanting to come back for more.

Since the complaints seem to be based on the story becoming monotonous, perhaps if Justin or Charlotte does something slightly OOC it'll make for some drama and, in turn, pique the interest of the readers.  Maybe show a vulnerable side of Amelia so for the moment we, as readers, have a bit of sympathy for her.  It for a minute might make us doubt what Charlotte and Justin are doing but it will help to build up some tension and conflict with not only our emotions, but the storyline as well.  Or throw some new twist into the plot line.  I know I usually have the entire story(s) I am writing mapped out in my head - but there have been a few times when I have totally deviated from that and found that the new way worked even better.

I hope you know my initial review was meant as concrit.  I'm sorry you took it as anything other than that.  Essentially EVERYONE who offers up a review to you is a critic.  A critic is someone who offers up their opinions whether they be good or bad.

Oh and, it seems you DO respond to anonymous reviews - if they are positive.

I didn't have to go far back to find some...

I'm sorry you feel that way.  However, I just can't help but wonder if I had left a glowing, positive review, would you brush me off just the same?

By the way - I don't have an account on here but read and review a lot of stories.  It doesn't mean I'm cowardly - just too lazy to sign up.

Jasmine (my name, if you please)

I don't understand why anyone would go into a fit over this review.  If you are a writer you have to expect some criticism once in awhile - constructive or not.  You are never going to please everyone and have to learn to deal with it, be mature about it. 

And if you really feel you can't take anythng away from it, ignore it.  If you're happy with your work, that's what matters.

Even some of the biggest writers/authors out there have people who dislike or "bash" their work.

brittbratt - before you make any assumptions about me, I would like to start off by saying I myself am a writer, and no, I am not the original reviewer. I write for several different fandoms and all of my stories are well-received with hundreds of reviews, most of which are positive. I can say without a doubt that if someone left me this review, I would most definitely take their criticism as constructive. If my reader(s) are getting bored with my story, then obviously it is something I need to address. And, in my opinion, writing the same thing over and over is NOT "building the story". You cannot build up to anything if there is no progression. In other words, you can't build a house if you build and rebuild the same wall over and over again. You'll never get anywhere. I understand that we sometimes need "filler" chapters, but even those should offer something new to the storyline. Most readers have an emotional involvement with the story and if we, as writers, cannot manipulate their feelings toward our characters, then yes, they will get bored. I think that is a pretty big issue that needs to be addressed.

You might argue "who cares what one or two people think?" I can tell you - I would. What happens if I keep going down the same repetitive path? I might lose another few with the next chapter, and a few more with the one after that and so on and so on.

I understand you love this story and your need to defend the writer - that's a good loyal reader. But I also think the one who left the original review is loyal as well - hence the reason they left the review. I wouldn't want people telling me how much they loved my new chapter just because, I would rather they be honest and let me know where I am slipping and how I can improve. To me, if you are writing just to write and get a chapter posted, then you are writing for the wrong reasons. I first and foremost write for myself. That's not to say I don't love my readers and the feedback I get or that I don't want to please them. But I have made several of my readers upset with the direction I take some of my stories in; however, I still have them hooked on an emotional level. They care enough about the characters to come back and read what's going to happen. If you've lost that emotional connection, then there isn't much left. Now if someone were to leave me a review like Anonymous did, I would definitely take a closer look at my story. Plus you'd better believe I would take a look at all my other stories as well to make sure I am not making the same mistakes there; I'd want to improve as a writer as a whole. Not just do what I can to keep the readers for the one story.

And by the way, that original reviewer never said they did not like either this story or the "Skystin" ones. Nor did they expect not to receive any bashings (hence the reason they asked that it be kept to a minimum). They were merely stating their opinion and observations. They also apologized in advance to people like you who took offense to it.

All in all I think their review was polite and definitely something to think about. I also have to say I agree with Anonymous. The story has seemed to have lost a lot of the luster it once had. That's not to say most of the readers feel this way, but, as I mentioned before, if it continues down this same path, more might change their opinions down the line.

If you're going to leave criticism at least TRY and make it constructive instead of just saying you're bored with the story.  By the way, this so-called "writing the same thing over and over" is usually referred to as building the story.  But you wouldn't get that because you've probably never written anything yourself.  Also, what the hell does Skystin have to do with this?  You should probably keep your ground-breaking reviews to one story you dislike at a time.  BTW if you're going to leave a review like that anonymously on a story that has almost SIX HUNDRED reviews, don't expect to  not have someone bash you. 

ANYWAYS....

I think my favorite part of this section is when Charlotte throws her phone at the couch.  I think everybody's had that feeling where you really want someone to say what you want them to say and when they don't you just get this sharp feeling of anger/disappointment/hurt.  You captured that really well because when I read that, I could instantly think of times when I'd had that feeling.