Comments For Trivial Times
Anonymous (Signed) on Jul 23, 2011 10:54 am (Questioning Myself)
it's par



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 13, 2011 09:13 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Ok, I like that Chris is all into Jazzy's relationship with Tristan, and telling her all about the possible details..lolz And I actually have a sister name Fatima, so far its okay.. :) Needs to be detailed more though..

Author's Response: More details to come in following chapters. Fatima Robinson-BSB's choreographer back then. She worked with them for so very long and I commend her for dealing with them for so long-I heard how difficult they could be (stubborn and cranky).



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 04, 2011 09:19 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Ahh Yes..Thats JC alright, Daddy C, always looking for out for those he cares about. I also find it cute that all wake up in the same hotel room, awws..that would be fun to wake up too..lolz Nice job on this chapter, thanks for the update.. :)

Author's Response: This is also not finished yet... There will be more for this chapter hopefully tonight... What comes to mind is detailed and I focus on those for this one... My other story was a dream and I followed the speed of it.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 04, 2011 08:24 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
I forgot to read this chapter, lolz



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 03, 2011 09:43 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)

I wish the guys can give me a piggy back ride, that would be cute.. lolz Gosh alcohol can make ppl do crazy things, grinding Lance and whatnot..its an okay chapter, thanks for the update. to Dublin it is.. :D



Author's Response: It was a pretty boring chapter, kinda just to fill the time gap between the busy hectic day and the flight to Dublin.... She's only there for 11 days.... There's so much to be talked about, dealt with, and solved...



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 03, 2011 09:35 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Woww..at age 11?? Pssh..so nice that JC is so understanding though.. :)

Author's Response: She has been through alot more than what seems to be...



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 01, 2011 08:34 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Oh yes she's going to love it alright.. :) She's gonna travel to Dublin...and hang with the guys..Woo hoo! and lolz Jazz Bean.I think this chapter is okay..thanks for the update..

Author's Response: Her mom changes some things and loosens the reigns. She knows Lynn and JC can keep Jazzy in check. Just updated with another one. Might have to edit it...



theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 01, 2011 08:14 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Ahh yes Mario Kart 64, one of my fave games.. :) lolz Anywho, looks like Jazzy and Nick are gonna get acquainted soon.. ;) Nice job.. *reads next chapter*

Author's Response: Thanks. I still have my N64 MarioKart and Mario for it. Yes, and by the chapter I just put up, maybe sooner than they think.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Apr 29, 2011 08:45 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Oooooh..talk about a small world, and a little reunion time oh the things you find at the beach.. tee hee.. I like this chapter..Thanks for the updates.. :)

Author's Response: Thank you for READING. Yes, small world. Nick and his family lived in Tampa at that time and it was just months before Aaron's first tour with big brother Nick and the boys. Jazzy still has no real idea on who Nick is but she will learn when she meets him. She does stay in touch with *NSYNC (all 5 of them), Andi and Lynn. She also forges strong bonds with each of the Carter kids and Jane (Nick's mom), each one is different than the other.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Apr 29, 2011 08:35 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Woo hoo the beach! Yeah I hate goodbyes too..nice job on this one. *reads next chapter*

Author's Response: I love the beach myself! Even though I haven't been to one in 13 years this summer. =?( I never really enjoyed good byes. I don't think anyone does.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Apr 29, 2011 08:20 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
AWW! :) Thats cute and sweet! I wanna jump on the trampoline with Chris, that would be fun, lolz the rude awakening that JC gave Jazzy was kinda funny, oh and the body wash she uses, is the same one as mine.. Tee hee..Im actually understanding this story now, thanks for the update.. *reads next chapter*

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm slowly seeing Jazzy grow and change, dealing with everything. There's more characters coming into play, some are celebs (and their families), some will be original. JC seems laid back but somehow manages to keep her in check. It'll show in the next few chapters. Look for it.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Apr 28, 2011 07:51 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
HA! the water balloon fight was fun, after all Chris is the master at pulling pranks, I think this chapter is okay..Im still thinking though what is the story about..I know that Jazzy moves into a new town and all, but the rest I dont know..

Author's Response: It's mainly about making new friends, coping with change, and normal teen issues (Dating, friends, school, growing up). Next chapter is the day before they leave for Germany again. They leave early afternoon.



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Apr 26, 2011 08:51 pm (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)
Man, I wish it WAS JC's number.. pssh..lolz But thats cool that she's getting a cell phone, I think this chapter is a little bit better than the previous one, but Im not so sure..

Author's Response: I looked up area codes and prefixes for Orlando, FL. I know it's not. I wish too. I'm working on getting better. Hopefully it shows. Thanks for your reviews! Thanks for reading!



anon (Anonymous) on Apr 26, 2011 11:36 am (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)

"Hope I can say what needs to be said."

that irked me so much. no one would say that out loud, let alone a guy, that'd be more like a thought. i don't mean to sound mean but the way you write gives away WAAAY too much and the characters don't even feel true to what the guys are really like.

nice try



Author's Response:

That quote can mean quite a few things. It can also cover quite a few emotions. It was written, not spoken. The order the notes were written were:Lance, JC flipped the page and wrote his before putting it back, and Justin.

Thank you for your honest opinion. I will try to improve on that.

JC now feels protective of her and it will show.




anon (Anonymous) on Apr 26, 2011 11:34 am (Orlando, Another Wasted Move?)

ok, this is very unrealistic. For one, i HIGHLY doubt the guys talk about their feelings that much. They're boys. And i couldn't see a 13 year old and a 17 year old kissing, let alone making out THAT FAST when she just met them. also, it's bad to swtich Point of Views from 3rd person in one chapter to 1st, let alone it's worse jumping from two different character's POVs so suddenly.

this needs a lot of work



Author's Response:

I am experimenting with POVs.

When it comes to teenagers, more often than not, sometimes they don't think before they act. You will see how Jazzy learns from her first kiss and how she feels about it. Keep in mind, she's almost 13, just got uprooted from everything she knows, and like most teenagers-will have a rebellious period. Hers will come soon enough.

She is also scared and JC has figured her out as well as Chris. So pay attn to what they say. Lynn knows her best because of the bonding-Jazzy practically told her everything and have become very close.




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