“Good point,” he chuckled. He felt a tug on his arm and turned his head to see Chris shove Mack hard enough that she let go of his arm and fell onto the ice on her butt.

“Ahhh, you’re finally falling for me,” Chris said before he burst out in hysterical laughter.

I loved that part. Chris is so funny.

Awwww JC is SO smart!!!!

I liked this chapter. Look at the time! It's too late but I can't stop reading!!

I'm too tired. Hey! can I be part of the story? I could be a journalist or something. I could be friends of you when you lived in Canada or something... ^^

I think my major beef with this chapter is that it brought the action of the story down for me. I get that it's an important point in the story but it doesn't come across as that to me.

Technically it's all sound; syntax, and grammar are good; the chapter is coherent and cohesive enough. But it still lacks in the manner the narration is created. I can't put into words what exactly but... meh. 

Ps. Would you want to talk about your story over AIM? I have questions that I'd rather not address here *u*;