That was a beautiful song :) I loved it. Was the italics flash backs from their date? I couldn't quite tell.
But it was a great update! I'm really loving this story.
Author's Response:
The italics were flashbacks of their 'date.' I tried to space it so you could see it wan't in the current moment.
Thanks ;) (I can't want for all the details to unfold!)
Author's Response:
I love the idea of having pieces of her surfacing to the viewer and Justin at the same time!
Thanks ;)
Well, first of all, I hate you. No, I’m joking. Ok, maybe just a bit.
You already know how I feel about this chapter, but here it goes one more time. Because, well, I enjoy reading what other people comment. I like knowing how differently others thought of the same thing I read. Plus, I'm just nosy :)
The song was perfect. Sometimes when lyrics are incorporated into the writing, it takes me a second or two to figure out the song. This time, however, I just knew it. I saw it. I saw the whole scene. I saw how something as innocent as tinkering on the keys could lead to this huge landslide. It only takes a little bit of wind to cause a tidalwave.Three lines stood out: 1) she wanted parts of her life part à uh, hello! We all wish there was a fucking rewind button! It simply broke my heart knowing she was human. Because she is, and your writing has humanized her. 2) Listen to her words. She’s telling you her entire story à We don’t hide. People hurting don’t hide. It’s the people around them that don’t hear their calls for help. I loved Trey. He is heaven-sent. 3) She was his breath of fresh air à And vice versa. Right? It was just perfect. I love how you continue to tease us. That’s what you are. A huge tease! Great job!
S/N: the kiss scene is perfect. Keeping it simple, yet leaving some mystery about it. I liked it a lot.Author's Response: Let me start by again thanking you. I test out my chapters of this story on you, not knowing if all my crazy thoughts are actually coming across as a story or just my crazy thoughts. So I am extremely gracious that you continue to read and beta my things for me. You are amazing <3 We talk about how incredible that song is all the time, but there was something about ‘creating that titalwave’ for her to go through that seemed to fit and lines of that song (will) explain more of her story, more of her history.I heart Trey. I just adore him and want him in my life. That line “Listen to her words. She’s telling you her entire story…” I loved the idea of taking a song and deciphering it like you would a poem. Look beneath the lines and the words to listen to her story! In time that will happen. And yes, you can hate me, because I know you really secretly love me!
Great update! =)
Author's Response:
I don't have another word to use for that song, it is just simply incredible. I love everything from the melody, echo of that pianio, her voice, and the lyrics. I love every piece of it.
Really, go find the live version on Youtube. The studio verision is great but the live version will give you chills. AMAZING. (By the way Sara just released a 'Live from Soho' EP which has an incredible live version on it!)
Thanks love ; )