Comments For One Night
jersey_tenn (Signed) on Feb 10, 2011 09:08 am (Breathe Again)

Well, first of all, I hate you. No, I’m joking. Ok, maybe just a bit.

You already know how I feel about this chapter, but here it goes one more time. Because, well, I enjoy reading what other people comment. I like knowing how differently others thought of the same thing I read. Plus, I'm just nosy :)

The song was perfect. Sometimes when lyrics are incorporated into the writing, it takes me a second or two to figure out the song. This time, however, I just knew it. I saw it. I saw the whole scene. I saw how something as innocent as tinkering on the keys could lead to this huge landslide. It only takes a little bit of wind to cause a tidalwave. 

Three lines stood out: 1) she wanted parts of her life part à uh, hello! We all wish there was a fucking rewind button! It simply broke my heart knowing she was human. Because she is, and your writing has humanized her. 2) Listen to her words. She’s telling you her entire story à We don’t hide. People hurting don’t hide. It’s the people around them that don’t hear their calls for help. I loved Trey. He is heaven-sent. 3) She was his breath of fresh air à And vice versa. Right? It was just perfect. I love how you continue to tease us. That’s what you are. A huge tease! Great job!

S/N: the kiss scene is perfect. Keeping it simple, yet leaving some mystery about it. I liked it a lot.

Author's Response: Let me start by again thanking you. I test out my chapters of this story on you, not knowing if all my crazy thoughts are actually coming across as a story or just my crazy thoughts. So I am extremely gracious that you continue to read and beta my things for me. You are amazing <3 We talk about how incredible that song is all the time, but there was something about ‘creating that titalwave’ for her to go through that seemed to fit and lines of that song (will) explain more of her story, more of her history.I heart Trey. I just adore him and want him in my life. That line “Listen to her words. She’s telling you her entire story…” I loved the idea of taking a song and deciphering it like you would a poem. Look beneath the lines and the words to listen to her story! In time that will happen.  And yes, you can hate me, because I know you really secretly love me!



Covergirl (Signed) on Feb 10, 2011 01:10 am (Breathe Again)
WOW!!! WOW!!! Now I need to find that song and listen...really listen to it.

Great update! =)

Author's Response:

I don't have another word to use for that song, it is just simply incredible. I love everything from the melody, echo of that pianio, her voice, and the lyrics. I love every piece of it.

Really, go find the live version on Youtube. The studio verision is great but the live version will give you chills. AMAZING. (By the way Sara just released a 'Live from Soho' EP which has an incredible live version on it!)

Thanks love ; )



champ (Signed) on Feb 04, 2011 06:17 pm (a little jump)
Keep the chapters coming... Liking it ...

Author's Response:

Thanks love ; ) They words are spilling out as we speak into chapters!!




AmberW (Signed) on Feb 03, 2011 11:10 pm (a little jump)

Yay! A second date!

I wish my blind dates were Justin Timberlake lol



Author's Response:

 I wish the same thing, everyday! lol I would just like someone to enchant me!

Thanks love ; )



a_moments_grace (Signed) on Feb 03, 2011 06:48 pm (a little jump)

You took this in a direction I wasn't expecting.  I totally thought that JT was the daddy.  Now I'm really curious to know what else you have up your sleeve. 

I liked it :) update soon!



Author's Response: I think everyone thought he was the father!! I have a few things up my sleeve that I’m about to pull out!Thanks love ; )



azchickadee (Signed) on Feb 03, 2011 06:38 pm (a little jump)
ok, so....I'm confused...which, really isn't anything new.  LOL  I'm confused often.  I thought for SURE Justin was the father of Adi's baby but then they just met and they haven't met before.  O_o  I don't like being confused, Mel.  lol...you better fix this!  hahaha  <3

Author's Response: Gotcha!! I had a strong feeling that everyone would assume he was the father.I’ll fill you in on the details… soon : ) Thanks love! Let’s just hope I don’t disappoint when the details do unfold.



shan030709 (Signed) on Feb 03, 2011 12:53 pm (Breathe)
Wow, there is definitely something tragic lying underneath the surface of this story.  I love it!!  Cannot wait to read more.

Author's Response:

Thanks love ;) I am excited to unfold this story!

You’re a faithful returning reading, I love it!

 




Anonymous (Anonymous) on Jan 26, 2011 05:00 pm (Dotted Line)

I'm really enjoying this story. I love how you haven't revealed too much, I love stories where the reader isn't in on the secrets and all the mysteries are revealed with time. 

Your writing is great. The way you describe things makes me feel like I'm actually in the story. Hope you update soon. :) 



Author's Response:

With this story I took a whole new approach for me as the writer and I’m pleasantly surprised that everyone seems to like the revealing of secrets slowly, plus it keeps you interested in what could happen next…

Thank you for your kind words. ((Hugs)) & I hope you continue to enjoy this story.




Covergirl (Signed) on Jan 26, 2011 07:00 am (Dotted Line)
Twists and turns already...I love it! The wheels are spinning in my head. Great job! =)

Author's Response:

Twists and turns is what I’m good for! Buckle up, because there is going to be some fast moving ones!

Thanks love!




champ (Signed) on Jan 25, 2011 09:28 pm (Dotted Line)
Keep them coming!!

Author's Response: Thanks :)



azchickadee (Anonymous) on Jan 25, 2011 06:34 pm (Dotted Line)
ahhh!!!  I love it!!  This is different than your other stories.  I love how we're just getting bits and pieces of information as we go.  I'm insanley curious to know the full back story, but I know it'll come :) 

Author's Response:

This is very different for me. I started writing it during Secret Santa, only because I couldn’t get the idea out of my head. Then I put it aside because I thought my thoughts were too crazy and too scattered, but somehow, someway it seems to be working out. I was hoping the ‘bits and pieces’ idea was going to come across and not just make sense to me. The back story will unfold, I promise!

Thanks love : ) 

 




SJane (Signed) on Jan 25, 2011 05:27 pm (Dotted Line)
i swear you could write a load of jumble on a napkin and id still enjoy it i love the way you write

Author's Response:

*Blushes* Wow. That is an enormous compliment. Wow... I don't even know what to say in response to that other than THANK YOU. I hope I don't disappoint. I have something to live up to now.

Thanks ;)




champ (Signed) on Jan 21, 2011 02:47 pm (Breathe)
update soon!!

Author's Response:

Done and another will come soon!

Thanks ;)




azchickadee (Anonymous) on Jan 21, 2011 12:41 pm (Breathe)
Finally getting a chance to read this. I'm intrigued. I want to know what happens next!! :)

Author's Response:

I can't wait to reveal the layers of all the characters in this story! It's going to be a journey!

Thanks love ;)




Lady T (Anonymous) on Jan 21, 2011 09:12 am (Breathe)
OMG musicmel!!! You already know that i'm excited about your work! can't wait for this one :-)

Author's Response: Eek!! I'm excited that you are excited!! I can't wait for everyone to explore these characters. I have tons planned for them.





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