Comments For We're Halfway There
Fwen-Person (Anonymous) on May 20, 2011 10:22 pm (Chapter 5- It was like...)
i know you said that you wanted constructive critcism so this is what i got from this chap.......and well the previous chaps as well.....i noticed that you switch from Liz's POV to JC's POV and to the author's POV and it kinda confuses me...so mayb if you could write 'Liz's POV' right before your put herr POV that would be helpful...but all in all the story is goin amazing so far :D.....keep the awsome writing.........i have nothing bad to say about your writing style because to me its absolutely great!!!
Author's Response:
Author's Response:
Mmm okay.. Something for me to work at.. Let's see :D
Personally, i wasn't trying to create a certain POV for the characters and/or the autho because didn't want to have it be saying 'I looked at JC" for Liz's POV and then 'I looked at Liz" for JC's POV.. I was just trying to write the story from what was just going on at that point.. LOL sorry if i'm confusing u with the story and/or this response.. LOL thank you so much for your opinion and being honest and i'll try to keep it in mind for upcoming chapters! Thanks for the criticism and the compliments! I'm glad you're enjoying!
Anonymous (Signed) on May 07, 2011 05:32 pm (Chapter 5- It was like...)
This chapter was great. Post more soon
Author's Response: Thank you =) And i will!!
Author's Response: Thank you =) And i will!!
Mack_Attack22 (Signed) on May 05, 2011 03:37 pm (Chapter 5- It was like...)
I absolutely love how shy they are around each other. It makes the tension great. There are a few misplaced punctuation marks here and there but it doesn't mess up the flow of the story. Can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response: Thank you alot for reviewing and reading! I especially love to see what your reviews because i enjoy your tips (and encouragement for more updates) =) Look out for the next one! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you alot for reviewing and reading! I especially love to see what your reviews because i enjoy your tips (and encouragement for more updates) =) Look out for the next one! ;)
Megan (Anonymous) on May 05, 2011 12:48 am (Chapter 5- It was like...)
JC and Liz are just too cute trying to avoid their feelings for each other. Would love to be at that pool/BBQ with all the boys shirtless...=). Can't wait for another update.
Author's Response: Ahhh you and i both!! haha :)) Thank you for reading/reviewing!!
Author's Response: Ahhh you and i both!! haha :)) Thank you for reading/reviewing!!
theusagirl (Anonymous) on May 04, 2011 08:01 pm (Chapter 5- It was like...)
WOOO! Man, I wanna go to the pool party and have a BBQ with those guys, I mean, hello shirtless?? *drool* Ok, Im loving this, even though Liz and JC are trying to forget that "kiss" but hey..the feelings are still there.. ;) Great job on this chapter..Looking foward to the next one.. :D
Author's Response:
Author's Response:
Mmmm you've got me fanatsizing when i should go write!! hahaha =) JC and Liz, well you'll have to keep reading :D ;) Thank you!!
