Comments For One Night
dani86 (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 04:01 pm (Chapter 1)
ooooo plz keep this story up its great
Jersey_tenn (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 12:25 pm (Chapter 1)
Good post...i just have a suggestion. Work on your punctuation, and breaking up the paragraph. It was a bit difficult to follow because I couldn't tell what was dialogue and what was description. We like to serve as betas if you need help! Congrats on your first post!
Lershmer (Anonymous) on Aug 24, 2011 11:46 am (Chapter 1)
It's a good story, but work on the puncuation. It was hard for me to follow since I couldn't tell when they started talking and whatnot. Keep it up though
