Comments For Supremacy System
theusagirl (Anonymous) on Dec 09, 2011 09:01 pm (Chapter 11: Fifteen Minutes in Hell)

Well, if I had to "rent" an *NSYNC guy for the night, I'll choose JC and Chris. I would be really nice to them, and of course I would kiss them, I'll kiss JC more. ;) And for Chris, a really good friend, I don't have the heart to take advantage of them.

Now, as for the story, the "15 Minutes of Heaven" was rather interesting, but being a cage and having all those crazy girls over them, thats just nuts. And looks like Isadora is agreeing with Lexi's plan..hmm.

Nice job. Thanks for the update..




Megan (Anonymous) on Dec 09, 2011 12:58 am (Chapter 11: Fifteen Minutes in Hell)

I love this story! It is just so different from any other story out there and thats kinda awesome :). It is hard to read how sick the guys are and just being absolutely tortured by this new promotion crap. I hope that Isadora will pull through and buy the guys and let Lexi work with them.

On a side note, if I could rent a guy I would probably rent either JC or Lance. I think just spending time with JC would be nice and enjoyable and Lance would be awesome to have a great deep conversation with. Probably give JC and kiss or two ;).



Author's Response:

Thanks as much as I would love to say that it's a completely orginal idea, i did get parts of it from Anime Cartoons that I have seen - the names of which I can't recall at the moment.  In those the roles are usually switched so I guess I did make modifications.  :)  But those cartoons have some pretty odd story lines. 

I have made myself cringe a few times while writing, it's bad and I can't tell you where I come up with some of this stuff.  It just kind of hits me, Jade is pure evil and I to think that there are people like her in the world that would absolutly do this stuff. But I have put them through everything for a reason, it will get better.

I am actually a few chapters a head (i like to re-read them a few times before I post) and it's where Isadora comes to save them, I just wanted to make sure that her actions where realistic with how a REAL FAN would act.




creativechaos (Signed) on Dec 08, 2011 11:04 pm (Chapter 11: Fifteen Minutes in Hell)

I'd also rent all of them just to get them away from the hell they're in - give them a nice warm bed and a good meal. I'd rent them for as many nights as I could afford. If I was broke and had to choose - either JC or Lance. Lance because he's my favorite, and of course I wouldn't take advantage of him, I'd much rather stay up all night and have a wonderful conversation with him. I'd probably beg him to give me one kiss, just so I could say that I had gotten that in my life lol. I'd actually be more tempted to rent JC though - because he's sick, and he really needs someone to take care of him. That's such a hard choice though because they're ALL sick and need someone to take care of them!

I've been reading every chapter - I'm absolutely 100% hooked. Thanks for your quick updates, this is awesome! 



Author's Response:

Thanks, I am glad you like it.  I know it can be 'dark' at times.  I was worried that people wouldn't like it becuase it is a little odd and dark, but I love it.  I re-read it a lot, if it is possible to be addicted to your own story then I am.

 

As for JC just to calrify what is wrong with him - as any one who has had too much to drink can atest it takes a toll on your stomach. Especially if you drink on an empty stomach.  In throey all the guys would be suffering from this but JC is the only one who is admitting to having it.




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Dec 05, 2011 08:44 pm (Chapter 10: A Complicated Love)

I liked this chapter. And JC has feelings for Lexi.. *happy sigh* I also like the convo that JC and Justin had, hahaa Joshtin moment and of course Joey.

I like these lines here Lexi could be JC’s friend, his really cute and fun friend. Some day he would come around.

Thanks for the update. :)




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Dec 02, 2011 11:15 am (Chapter 9: Wonderland)

Alright Lexi! I like these lines here "N Sync should he playing at sold out arenas not a night club. And they should be treated like gods, not slaves." Yes sirree. :D

 I also like the convo she had with Lance, I like that he's understanding.

Good chapter, thanks for the update. :)




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Nov 16, 2011 08:27 pm (Chapter 8: I Need You)

O_O

Wow..Chris just collapsed on stage? I really hope Jade gets attacked by a pack of angry wolves, cause she's a vicious woman.. *balls fist* And see Lexsi knew that Chris couldn't perform on stage, in fact none of them couldn't at the moment..

But I like that kiss that JC gave Lexsi, and you're right, it did seem like the right thing to do at that moment. :)

Nice job, thanks for the update.




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Nov 14, 2011 07:37 pm (Chapter 7: Fear and Friendship)

So thats what happened to Chris, and yeah I'm sure Lance is around there as well. :( I like the "friendship" that Lexsi and JC have though, but they have to keep apart sometimes from that hideous Jade woman...

However nice update.. :)




isela (Anonymous) on Nov 14, 2011 01:01 pm (Chapter 1:The Worst Kind of Prison)
really enjoying this.  would love to see some cast pics of lexi and jade

Author's Response:

insteresting... I hadn't thought about cast pics.  I will have to see what I can find.  Lexi is losely based on 2 of my friends (kind of combined together) she is (in my mind) a woman of averge beautiful but has a heart of gold, and Jade is just a monster that I created. lol. 

 

a little spoiler - There is a 3rd important female charator that will be introduced in an upcoming chapter, someone from Lexi's past and Chris's future love interest, her name is Isadora (for the readers and Chris fans out there wondering why I listed Chris as a main charactor). 




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Nov 02, 2011 11:55 am (Chapter 6: New Addition)
Poor Chris, :( But I think its nice that Justin and JC want to show him around, despite all he just been through. Good chapter.



Megan (Anonymous) on Oct 25, 2011 01:29 am (Chapter 5: Circus Monkey)
This story is so heartbreaking to see the guys going through but it is sweet to see that Lexie and JC get along well, Justin seems to be deteriating rapidly...:(. Good job on this so far!



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Oct 23, 2011 07:34 pm (Chapter 5: Circus Monkey)

"God what she wouldn’t give to be young and dumb again. When you biggest concern in life was chasing after boy bands and listening perky pop music at a high volume. This life was just getting way to complicated."

*sigh* yes when times were simpler.. :P

But anyway I like how JC was concerned about Lexsi, so that was nice. I like how this is going so far, thanks for updating.




theusagirl (Anonymous) on Oct 20, 2011 06:53 pm (Chapter 4: Don't Blink)

Man oh man.. WOW! Woosh. That woman is terrible, she needs to get attacked or something. LOL!

This line here " I am sorry baby, but that costs extra.” He offered. Tee hee..I like that. :P

But oohh..this is good. I like how this going, thanks for updating..




dani86 (Anonymous) on Oct 20, 2011 08:15 am (Chapter 1:The Worst Kind of Prison)
Although the story is really sad you have me hooked. Good and different love it please update soon.



creativechaos (Signed) on Oct 19, 2011 08:16 pm (Chapter 1:The Worst Kind of Prison)
That woman is so evil! Poor JC and Justin. :( Another great chapter, though!

Author's Response: Thank you, I did say it would be a sad story at least in the begining but I swear things are going to turn around eventually.  Sadly I actually had a large chunck of the middle already written just trying to connect them.  :)



theusagirl (Anonymous) on Oct 16, 2011 07:28 pm (Chapter 3: For Sale)
UGHH! That Jade woman sounds mean. HMPH! Though at least Justin and JC are sharing a room, so thats fine, but the way you described the room with the posters on the wall, pathetic indeed.. :( Good job though..thanks for updating.





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