theusagirl (Signed) on Aug 27, 2013 11:44 pm (Chapter 2)

Oooh...well, thats something. Hmm..that line really made Clay mad, he needs to control his temper, I hope he doesn't go to Grayson and cause a scene..is he??

On a lighter note, I like the playful banter between Chris and JC in the studio, these lines here: "

Hello?” Chris called into the large studio as he opened the door.

“Chris?” he heard JC’s voice from behind one of the small voice studio rooms.

“Yep,” Chris answered, and followed the sound of JC’s voice. He was sitting at a piano, plunking out a few random chords and humming to himself as he did so. “Hey, man. Lesly kicked me out. Apparently trying on jewelry was not her idea of a good time for me.”

“Unbelievable,” JC chuckled and stopped playing. “Are you really lacking for something to do?”

“I’m bored as hell,” Chris admitted, sitting down across from JC on a leather bound couch.

LOL! I can totally hear Chris saying that.

Pretty good chapter..thanks for the update..



Author's Response:

Thanks! More to follow soon...

Alysen B. 




Unicornmaiden13 (Signed) on Aug 10, 2013 11:41 am (Chapter 2)
I was pleased to see about the update, and needless to say, you did a superb job. I love the family environment and I especially love Chris's little "cameo appearance." I also admire the way you dare to delve into Clay's psyche and we have a better understanding of his actions, even if they're still unconscionable.


Author's Response:

Thanks so much :) Chris should be making more of an appearance as the story goes on. More surprises to come!

Thanks again for your review! It means a lot.

Alysen B. 






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