Dreamingtilthisday (Signed) on Oct 19, 2020 02:56 pm (Breakfast and Confessions)

HOLY.. MOTHER. OF. FUCK. 

I can't tell you how this sounds so much like expressions id blurt out. I end up smiling like an idiot while reading. 😂🥰😜



Author's Response:

I love that!! Yeah, my head voice was strong in this first story. Thank you so much for the review! I was grinning writing it, so it makes me happy it translated 😘😁



theusagirl (Signed) on Jun 26, 2014 10:13 pm (Breakfast and Confessions)

It is the start of something good! I KNOW it! :D

Oh and THESE lines here: JC was standing at the stove cooking, wearing his underwear and a white undershirt. His feet are bare, his hair is mussed and he is wearing his glasses. That IMAGE.. *grins* I wish he was in MY kitchen cooking bacon looking like that.. ;) Don't we all though?? :)

I'm really glad that they are getting into deeper convos with eachother, thats how a relationship supposed to work first, communication is key, and respect for eachother..

Nicely done on this chapter..



elle-miranda (Signed) on Jun 23, 2014 12:41 am (Breakfast and Confessions)
It can be really difficult to stay in present tense, but you're doing a really good job of it, while keeping the action of the story flowing. Also, I'm really enjoying your dialogue. Great chapter--love that they had "the talk." I'm looking forward to more Ari and JC!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment, it makes me so happy that other people are enjoying my story and taking the time to review. More Ari and JC coming up!


Megan (Anonymous) on Jun 22, 2014 01:06 pm (Breakfast and Confessions)
haha they had "the talk". A good talk though to get stuff out in the open and not hide things anymore! :) cant wait to read more!

Author's Response: Working on the next chapter now!




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