I suppose it's only fair I give you more feedback for your story. Besides, I want feedback for my stories, too. Reviews are the fuel that keep the author and the story going. Oh, it's possible to complete a story without any reviews at all, but it's a lot less fun that way. As a writer, you want to know whether your work is any good and where you can make improvements.
Anyhow, this was a cute, endearing chapter, although I think the kiss on the lips was a tad too hasty. I'm a big believer in taking time with a relationship, in taking time to get to know the other person better. That's a slight problem I have with fairy tales and Disney movies, as much as I love 'em.
Your dialogue is the best, as always. What really jumped out at me was when JC told Johnny, "Johnny, you're my manager, not my father," and when Cass asked later, "Who are you, my mother?"
As cute and tongue-in-cheek as those comments are, it rubs me the wrong way when people get a little too flippant about their parents. My dad died recently, and of course my relationship with him wasn't the most ideal, but I've gained a deeper respect for fathers (and for mothers). Just saying.
Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback. I'm getting the feeling this story isn't quite what you were thinking it might be. I'm sorry if you feel let down. I do greatly appreciate your input. I am sorry for your recent loss, but I meant no disrespect to anyone with that dialogue. I have lost a parent, in-laws, and husband, so I am not one to be flippant about loved ones. However, I felt those comments depicted the emotions of the moment. No disrespect was ever intended. I often hear comments of that nature in the heat of conversation and felt they were appropriate where I placed them. Should you continue to follow the story, I hope you won't be disappointed. Thank you for sharing your opinions.
AWWWW! This story is beginning to have SO much SWEETNESS! I LOVE LOVE! :D
Don't know why I laughed so hard at these lines here: “Are you serious? JC, what are you up to?” “Johnny, you’re my manager, not my father. LOL! Maybe cause I can picture Johnny having a convo with JC about this..haha!
I also like that Cassandra and JC have such nice chemistry going on between them throughout the story, would read more soon.. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I really could see JC and Johnny having a discussion like that. I hope the chemistry between Cassandra and JC continues! ;)
Author's Response:
Thank you! I love all encouragement. Update coming! :)
Author's Response: Sometimes, you just gotta see the humor in JC! Thank you so much! :)
