hi i like the concept of your story, but i can't help but make some constructive critcisms to get more people reading your story :]

well first, don't write in huge paragraphs, a lot of people here are big into the whole grammatically correct thing, and hate seeing all this dialogue in one piece.  Plus, it makes it easier to see who is talking during dialogue.Your intro should be written something like this:

"He did WHAT!?!" Chris shrieked.  It was two weeks before *Nsync’s POP ODESSEY tour was to start and their masseur and physical therapist, Dale, had just quit.

 "How are we going to find somebody on such short notice?" Lance asked.

 "And who’s going to fix my back?" Justin whined.

"We’re working on that right now." their manager, Johnney, said trying to calm the guys down.

 "Besides, you guys have rehearsal." their choreographer, Wade, interrupted.

The guys followed Wade to the rehearsal hall and Johnney went back to work. Twelve hours later the five exhausted guys drug themselves out of the rehearsal hall. They were all ready to go home, but Johnney stopped them.

"Great news guys! We found you a new physical therapist. And even better, she starts first thing in the morning." "

She?" Joey asked with a grin.

"Yes, Joey. It’s a she, but don’t get any ideas. I don’t want you hitting on her as soon as you meet her. Understand?" Johnney replied.

"Ok." Joey replied glumly.

You get my drift, if not, feel free to check out one of my stories or to ask me more questions :]