Okay, proper review time:
-Amelia is a cunt. Plain and simple. I progressively dislike her more and more and I keep having to remind myself that she's not real, except I have to deal with very real-like version of her (albeit producers, but whatevs) every day so mostly I just want to make a dartboard with her face on it.
-Justin is wonderfully charming in this, though I hope he isn't legitimately giving Amelia to be as manipulative/calculating with him as she has been.
-Charlotte is love. But I wish she'd learn to speak up for herself (I know, I know, she can't, but a girl can dream, yeah?)
Anyway, point being, you've done a really lovely job of drawing out three very distinct characters who glide easily from one extreme to the next in terms of personality traits. And honey, your dialogue is FINE. :) Great work, doll!
P.S. Don't worry about the graphic, I've got a temp one so whenever you have time, I remember how school bullshit goes.
Author's Response: YAY god dialogue is the hardest part for me I swear. I love the recognition of the characters! I've said from the beginning that I REALLY wanted this to be a character driven story and its good to know I'm accomplishing that. Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: HAHAHAHAHA "break off a thing of two" I like that! And as far as a love/sexfest I have no idea what you're talking about *whistles* Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!!
Author's Response: Yeah I feel you. Money can't buy her Christmas with her family. I'm glad you're liking it. Hopefully more will come next week *prays for some free time* Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: I dunnooooo Patti's a hot little thing and Justin...well he has needs...soooooo I dunno you'll just have to wait and see *snigger* Thanks for reading and reveiwing!!!
Author's Response: YAY! Seriously I've been waiting to write this upcoming part of the story for SO LONG so I hope you guys are gonna like it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: HAHAHAHA you calling Amelia a tard seriously made my day!!! I love all your insights on the characters and as the story progresses we're gonna get more into all of the characters I promise! Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: Well I don't know if he is. I mean they're engaged! *snigger* Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: Awwww thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I'm hoping to get my next update out in a week or so but this internet sitch is Ca-Ray-Zay right now. Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
The memory hits her quickly and she’s in the middle of her front yard, the sky a hazy gray above her. She’s four years old, sitting on the sidewalk, clutching her baby doll to her chest, wide eyes looking up at the sky. A drop falls directly into her eye, stinging and she snaps them shut, tilting her chin down and shaking her head. She presses her fingers to her doll’s lids, forcing them down but they won’t stay, fluttering open, in danger of being attacked by the droplets as well. And then she hears it as clear as if it were just yesterday. “Come on kiddo, it’s starting to rain.”
Author's Response: EEP FLOOOOOOOOOOW *cuddles flow* I'm glad you appreciate the writing because...you know...that's the hardest part of writing o_O Does that make sense? No? Yeah okay then...erm...thanks for reading and reviewing....yeah...lol
Author's Response: YAAAAAAY Bri!!! Yeah girl I know how'd you'd be if Amelia did that to you. There would be an Amelia shaped hole in the wall where you threw her through it lol. Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
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Author's Response: HAHAHAHA I totally thought of you when I thought about ending it this way! Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: HAHAHAHAHA When DON'T you wanna jump Justin I mean really...lol I swear I haven't forgotten your graphic either. Life's gone bonkers on me. Thanks for reanding and reviewing!!!
I love this story so much. You have captured the vileness of some of the NYC "nobility" so incredibly well, that I'm sick to my stomach with Amelia lol. Justin's spirit is partially broken by the shrew he insists on being with but I love the glimpses you show, he is such a kid at heart and this portrayal makes me smile every time I read one of his antics/comments. I feel so sorry for him and Charlie, that I can only hope they rescue each other.
Get that internet working! Amazing job as always Heather.
Oh and that last line- an absolute classic that never gets old.
Author's Response: EEP thanks! I'm glad you liked it. This internet business I tell ya. They said it was gonna be several days *twitch* I'm glad you're liking Justin's character because I'm really enjoying writing him. Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
Author's Response: Hahahaha there's no telling what Memphis is gonna bring *zips lips* Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!
