I love this story and think you're a great author, yet I can't help but feel that the way JC acted was completely out of the character you created for him. I'm struggling to believe he would say those things (namely the I'll pay you line) to her, drunk or not.
That said, you are a very capable and competent writer and I'm sure you'll make me think otherwise in chapters to come. I can't wait for the next chapter to see how this plays out.
Author's Response: I'm sorry you felt like he was acting out of character. He has his reasons for acting the way he did...stick with me. Everything will be explained eventually :)
best chapter yet, i think. but you can't leave us hanging like that! you need to update again, like right now! please!?
i love it. this story just keeps getting better and better.
update soon please!
Okay when I read this story I sometimes forget that I am reading fiction and not reading what REALLY is in JC's head. Like that last paragraph seems like something that could really truely be going through his mind. Like you just opened up a part of his head saw what he was thinking and put it in your story. I LOVE that you make is so realistic, totally sucks me in...
Oh and why hasn't Rachel told him yet?? I realize that they were on opposite sides of the country in this chapter, but I am dying to see how JC handles the situation!! Don't make me come after you throwing shoes. Trust me I have good aim (just ask my roommate).
Great update hon! I'm anxious for Rachel to come clean about her traumatic past so that JC can better understand her! Hell yeah..he needs to work on his life..he's been lonely before Rachel!
LOL...LOVING the olympic swimming! *Whew*...
Oh I soooo love this story. I can see it going on and on and on... ;)
*raises hand* Now raise your hand if you were severely disappointed by "Breaking Dawn".
*Raises other hand*
This update is about 100 times better than Breaking Dawn as a whole. That book blew, and these updates give me something to look forward to every few days that does not involve my work! So thank you!!
Oh and if she doesn't tell him in the next chapter, I am going to hunt you down and peg you with some sand dollars (yes I know it is an empty threat, but it makes me feel better having made said threat).
Author's Response: Really? You didn't like Breaking Dawn? (I loved it) And my update was better? Really?!
*Hand wearily raised with ya here* Yeah...did the whole Breaking Dawn party/pick up the book thing...then it was...read..read..read. lol
Great update hon...Sad Rachel didn't go to the party with JC though!
Author's Response: glad you liked it! Hope you like the next chapter too...
Author's Response: thanks! glad you liked it :) hope you keep on liking it...
Author's Response: sigh...I don't know...lol. He is pretty perfect, huh? Is he too perfect? Is that even possible? lol
