i was just going to say - i think it's very telling about this series that you consistently left out any names. it reads like something that was very personal and probably difficult to write, so you get major props for laying it all out there like that. great job, love.
Author's Response: So you caught on to that, huh? I was wondering if anyone would notice, but you seem to be the first. and you're right. but it was probably the most theraputic thing I did for myself. Thanks for reading, though, and for the compliment.
Hey, sugar! So um...I'm bad and only just started this. But you've name-checked Audrey Hepburn, my all-time favorite, so now I HAVE to keep reading. ;)
For real though, great first chapter. Will let you know more the more I read.
Love that Trace and Belinda are gettin' along and love Justin's little streak of jealousy, even if the stubborn fucker won't admit it, haha. I know I'm reading this sooo slowly but I said I'd review as I went along, and I'm at least holding up that end of the bargain, right? You might be like...sixty by the time I'm done, but I'll finish, damnit!
"I think this is the start of a beautiful, if not promiscuous and tangled friendship”
Hahaha oh my god, love you for not only checking Casablanca but for that awesome little spin on the line.
Hepburn? Casablanca? What's next, Fight Club?
"we'll cover our tracks, tell a couple white lies, make sure we've got a good alibi and by the time they catch on we'll be outa their sight."
"Get Outta this Town" -Carrie Underwood
24 year old Callie is a first year teacher, fresh out of college, wearily preparing for the beginning of her new life.
Nervous and new to this world, she find a mentor and friend in a fellow teacher, Justin Timberlake, who's only 3 years her senior.
I just started reading this, but before I forget to do it I'll comment now, lol. I really dig your writing style, it's very effective without trying too hard. And I've never read Justin written as a teacher--which makes me like this even more. And it has only maybe a little to do with the massive crush I had on one of my teachers in HS, haha. Looking forward to reading more!
Author's Response: thanks for the comment! Teacher!Justin is my lover. haha. I'm glad you like it.
So, after having read "Sides of the Coin" and this in probably 4 days total (would've been quicker, but pesky little thing called work) I just have to say that you are absolutely, without a doubt, 100% out of your goddamn mind. And that's possibly the highest compliment I could pay you, haha.
Loved 'em, doll. Might be replacing Lovelight as second-favorites of yours.
Hey Jude, don't let me down
You have found her, now go and get her
Remember to let her into your heart
Then you can start to make it better
So let it out and let it in, hey Jude, begin
You're waiting for someone to perform with
And don't you know that it's just you, hey Jude, you'll do
The movement you need is on your shoulder
Hey Jude, don't make it bad
Take a sad song and make it better
Remember to let her under your skin
Then you'll begin to make it
Better
He's the producer, she's the artist. Together they will make music...with a little chaos thrown in.
totally random and not an actual review, per se, but it occurs to me that i call my boss "Boss Man" all the time and now I, too, would like to get on Justin's side and put in a vote for Abbey to stop calling him that because the mental image in my mind of my own boss almost lost my lunch for me, much as i love him.
that's all, love.
oh and updatenowplease. :D
Okay, little lady, I've got a bone to pick with you. As if I don't spend ENOUGH of my work day procrastinating, now I'm all hooked on this!
Gah - I love their interactions. They're hysterical and genuine and both such dorks, love it. It's a very natural build-up of the relationship and while i see I've got a ways to go yet, I just want them to BONE ALREADY!! I'm not impatient or anything, ahem.
Oh, also, ditch the needy clingy significant others cause both John and Jill? Wanna smack 'em.
You'll hear more when I get further along...for now I actually have to pretend to work. *grumble*
Good for her. John's a giant fucking cunt and I'm glad she got smart and got rid of him. Bah!
Author's Response: Tell me how you really feel.... heh. I laughed out loud at this comment. really.
FINALLY! though silly girl, what's with the running? and possibly might've been wise for justin to not do that in a room full of people...but he's a boy so 'wise' doesn't really apply to the thought process, does it?
Author's Response: No, wise doesn't apply even in the slightest. And Abbey is good at running, that's a girl thing :) You are a champ for catching up like this. I never thought that one of my stories would be 'catch up' worthy...you've made my week :)
“As much as I would enjoy just sitting here like this,” she starts, rubbing her legs against mine, “I am absolutely starving. You need to feed me.”
“Oh, I need to, do I?”
She looks up at me with these big doe eyes and nods, “Yeah, you do. I don’t kiss for free, Boss man.”
They are adorable and that is so something I would say. The "you need to feed me" and "i don't kiss for free" bits, haha.Alright, all caught up now.
The blog thing was cute...glad she got her head out of her ass and it didn't need to turn into a big drawn out thing because frankly, you took long enough to get them together in the first place and I would have had to beat you if you broke them up. haha I kid, sorta. Love it lady, can't wait to see what you've got in store.
cuuute. i'm glad they got their little happy ending - totally warranted. and i love that they didn't dissolve into this cliche of gross pet names and stuck with the ones that drive each other nuts, haha.
great job, lady! looking forward to more of your stuff.
Set in New York City, Justin Timberlake and Amelia Domineck are the hottest couple in the Manhattan social scene, and their wedding is fast approaching Event of the Year status. Amelia, headstrong and domineering, is not just planning her wedding, she’s choreographing it and Justin seems to simply be along for the ride, as well as Amelia’s assistant Charlotte who after accepting the job wonders if slavery somehow became legal without her realizing it. A Lolita wedding planner, a flakey assistant, and one bridezilla converge together to bring Charlotte and Justin closer and Justin begins to wonder… is this really all that’s left for him? A ring and a promise of forever with Amelia, or does he dare to dream of something more?
This is awesome so far.
I love how playful Justin is and Charlotte is endearing, though I do wish there were more moments of her being herself (ie calling Amelia out on her moods accidentally on the phone) with Justin and less politeness, but I s'pose that will come in time.
You have very distinct characters, which is a nice rarity in fanfic.
I just said this over at JJB but whatever, it bears repeating, lol.
That sex scene was awkward...and not the kind of awkward I usually feel when reading them. Really, really well written and just...painful.
And I agree with YellowHampster...you have written the demise of the relationship beautifully. Justin's emotions are palpable, and the struggle to hold onto something that clearly isn't there anymore is a universal thing that I think everyone's been through at least once in their lives, and it's heartbreaking to read. My only complaint (and it's so minor) is that I wish we could see glimpses of Amelia as the girl Justin fell in love with...even just occasionally, because she comes across as a little two-dimensional, and I like that you've shown Justin remembering discrepancies between how she once was and how she is now, although I'd like to see some of that struggle with Amelia herself.
But I love the way you've written Justin in this story...this sort of vulnerable, kind of eccentric guy who's clearly lost his direction a little, as far as life stuff goes. I'm looking forward to try and see him find his way back.
P.S. Weren't you once hosted at Blurred Vision when we were both babies? I'm pretty sure it was you, though I could be thinking of someone else...
Guh YES!!! That's really what I was going for in this section, just awkward and they just don't FIT together, even down to the way their bodies interlock they don't fit hahaha.
I'm glad you appreciate the characters and their interactions with each other because that's really what this story is about for me. I totally understand what you're saying about Amelia and that was a concern of mine as well. I kind of want her to be just a little two dimensional but I think she's coming off more as stock right now and I'm working on reeling her in a little. We'll see more of what she was like in the upcoming chapters but mostly through Justin's memories because Amelia's only struggle really is to change Justin. She's changed and "grown up" and he's still "stuck" where he was when they first started dating. I think she sees her change in personality as an evolution that takes place in everyone as opposed to what it really is, which is her becoming a stuck up bitch hahaha
I love your analysis of the characters and the constructive crit is ALWAYS welcome!!! Thank you so much for your thoughts and for reading and reviewing.
P.S. That WAS me at Blurred Vision! I was such a noob back then...lol I saw you SN on JJB and remembered you from the old BN board. I've always loved your stuff! and it's great seeing familar SNs!
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