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Reviewer: nikki g.
Anonymous
Date: 01/25/06 - 03:06AM
Title: Chapter 4
i like a lot, so update soon and thanks. J&B!
Reviewer: stacey
Anonymous
Date: 11/10/05 - 12:58PM
Title: Chapter 3
oh maaan the scene of her in the hospital room talking to her dad for the last time brought some serious tears to my eyes. im excited for when she finally lets him into her life. she needs it.
great great storyyy! im lovin it.
Reviewer: Katie
Anonymous
Date: 11/10/05 - 09:04AM
Title: Chapter 3
this story is great!!!
hopefully, she can encourage herself to go to the concert. :-)
Reviewer: swisschokatie
Signed
Date: 11/06/05 - 07:44AM
Title: Chapter 1
poor whitney. hopefully justin is patient enough to get through her walls...
Reviewer: Gigi
Signed
Date: 11/06/05 - 04:59AM
Title: Chapter 2
I hope she let's somebody in and by somebody I mean Justin.
Reviewer: Gigi
Anonymous
Date: 11/05/05 - 10:27PM
Title: Chapter 1
It was a good story but kind of confusing. One minute it's like the character is speaking and then it's like someone else is telling the story.
Author's Response: Hey Gigi,
I went back and read this chapter after reading what you said and I realized that you are completely right. So I edited it and tried to fix any tense changes there were. I'm kind of new to this whole story writing thing so there are probably still a lot of errors in it, but I do appreciate any constructive critism. So keep reviewing if you see any other mistakes and I will gladly do my best to fix them.
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