it's cuteish...but if you're trying to set up a situation between Jc/justin/traci then you should put more build into Jc. And if you are trying to set something up about justin possibly cheating, then you also need more build on that. It all seems too random. And your chapter seem like nothing is happening.. You should put more emtion into Traci and more conviction in JC. Your plot idea is nice good, just try to develope it more. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback, i enjoyed reading it. Even though i had stated...i wrote this a LONG time ago, like when I first started to write fan fiction. Then i stopped and picked it up again recently (but that\'s not until like last couple of chapters) but thanks for the feedback and i\'ll take it all into consideration :)

-Traci