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Reviewer: nikki g.
Anonymous
Date: 06/01/06 - 03:38PM
Title: Chapter 7: Our First Time
very cute story so far. update soon and thanks. J&B!
Reviewer: Nikki G.
Anonymous
Date: 05/24/06 - 10:25PM
Title: Chapter 5: First Date
Good. Update soon and thanks. J&B!
Reviewer: Nikki G.
Anonymous
Date: 05/23/06 - 12:37PM
Title: Chapter 4: Eye of the Beholder
Cool story.
Reviewer: matthews baby
Signed
Date: 05/20/06 - 06:35PM
Title: Chapter 1: Graduation
The theme of the story is pretty ordinary so try and maybe add a twist in there that no one is expecting to spice it up. Also, you have a few spelling errors like "smerk" but thats okie dokie. Um I wanna say use more description with the characters. What do Megan and Grace look like? What are they wearing? And try to describe their surroundings just a tad. That's all I've got, good job.
Reviewer: monkeymonkey85
Signed
Date: 05/20/06 - 03:26PM
Title: Chapter 1: Graduation
It's a good start! Maybe a little more detail about.. Megan and Graces friendship along with Megan and Justins, and Graces and Justins. That way we know a little more about their history and what not?
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