Reviewer: Sindi
Signed
Date: 09/19/06 - 05:21PM
Title: Prolouge - Just the beginning
Hmm I like it and want to carry on reading but sometimes it can get confusing when Nia says her thoughts. I know it's first person but try showing it in a different way.
And the spelling can improve I don't know if you want to miss out the g on some words but making some of the words slang drops the level slighlty. Sometimes you don't put a capital on Justin's name.
I thought I would just add in a few pointers to improve your work but we all have to start somewhere. Good Luck!
Author's Response: Thank you! lol
