Could you a little more depth but all in all it's pretty good. You're doing the self-esteem issue really well, I used to have those problems. Anyways, one other thing, try not to use the word 'said' so much, and try replacing it with another. It'd make it a lot easier to read. Good job, I'll add to my faves and continue reading later.

Author's Response: Thanks for replying. I'm getting quite sick of using 'said'. lol. I just don't know what else to use. I just hated typing up chapter 24, cause I think the use of 'said' is just sorta on overload.