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Reviewer: Updates Anyone?
Anonymous
Date: 04/05/06 - 06:30PM
Title: Hy'pathetic'al
I think the thing this story needs, other than an update, is instead of just telling us what she did, show us what she did. Make those brief paragraphs into actual scenes. So we can get a feel for how she gets along with Mark, what he looks like, etc. And when Justin told her that they weren't going to be together that phone convo could have made a nice scene. I really like this story, I just feel like it needs some fleshing out though.
Reviewer: Madcrazychick
Signed
Date: 12/20/05 - 03:29PM
Title: Hy'pathetic'al
So where is Ryan? I see everyone else talking about how he probably wants to see baby Jack, but his actions (or rather lack thereof) seems to be indictating otherwise. Baby mama drama or not if he really wanted to be there, why isn't he? I understand your frustrations in writing, I have those same problems all the time. So good luck on getting past it. :)
Reviewer: Gigi
Anonymous
Date: 12/20/05 - 03:43AM
Title: Hy'pathetic'al
Now that's wrong the fact that she hasn't let Ryan see the baby yet.
Reviewer: Amy A
Anonymous
Date: 12/19/05 - 09:45PM
Title: Hy'pathetic'al
Great update, i'm glad she has someone to talk to. And dont hate yourself your a much better writer & updater than me, lol. I understand it takes time. Don't rush yourself & have a merry xmas & a happy new Year! XXX
Reviewer: Gigi
Anonymous
Date: 12/18/05 - 06:19PM
Title: Lying in It
That is so sad.
Author's Response: Yeah, I think I'm depressed that I can't write as quickly or as well as I was at the beginning of the story and have now proceeded to take it out on Samantha.
Reviewer: Nique
Anonymous
Date: 11/30/05 - 05:33PM
Title: A Work In Progress
I agree with Madcrazychick. I want Ryan to be there for his kid, and I want Sam & Justin to work something out. Scratch that last part, I want Sam to get herself together first before she even thinks about chatting with Mr. Timberlake, then a few chaps from now get together with him.
Author's Response: I'll take that into consideration. :)
Reviewer: Nique
Anonymous
Date: 11/30/05 - 05:20PM
Title: Because I Love You
Okay, now I kinda feel bad for Ryan.
Reviewer: Nique
Anonymous
Date: 11/30/05 - 05:20PM
Title: Because I Love You
Okay, now I kinda feel bad for Ryan.
Reviewer: Madcrazychick
Anonymous
Date: 11/29/05 - 08:40PM
Title: A Work In Progress
Man, she's got two great guys so, so in love with her and she's just too messed up to appreciate it, or to do anything good about it. *sighs* I do want her to be with Justin, but since she's pregnant, I don't want Ryan to walk out of the picture completely. So "work in progress" or not, I want her to have her baby daddy around for the kid and Justin as boyfriend. :-D Make it happen, okay? lol It could be like "All Of Us" if you've seen that show (which is based on Will Smith's life). Update soon!
Reviewer: Hollie
Anonymous
Date: 11/29/05 - 03:50PM
Title: A Work In Progress
Oh dear oh dear... my poor heart can;t cope, more please!!!!
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