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Reviewer: Armando
Anonymous
Date: 07/26/05 - 09:24PM
Title: A New Beginning
I like this so far. Very spooky, and very original. Never read any Justin fics like this before. Keep up the good work.
Reviewer: Felix
Signed
Date: 07/22/05 - 11:20AM
Title: A New Beginning
Wow, I must say this story really caught my eye and that I'm really enjoying it so far! I just finished the first chapter, and my heart is totally going out to Justin and his little brother.
And, if you don't mind, I'd like to suggest a couple things... You might want to pay attention to keeping your tenses together. You switch a lot from present to pastense within paragraphs, which can get a little confusing. And also, you start a lot of new paragrpahs with the person's name. You could try using a pronuon instead, like "he" or "his" so that it doesn't get to sounding repetitive.
Now, away from that, dude this is great! It's so unique I can't wait to get onto the second chapter!
Reviewer: Gigi
Anonymous
Date: 07/20/05 - 08:25PM
Title: A New Beginning
This sounds like it's going to be so cool.
Reviewer: Angel
Anonymous
Date: 07/20/05 - 08:17PM
Title: A New Beginning
Hey Ryder, this Is my first time reading one of these types of stories.. very Interesting so far! Update soon please! :o)
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