Comments For Spoiled
JoJo (Anonymous) on Feb 10, 2008 06:11 am (Cheyenne)
Justin seriously needs to get over his fear and grow a pair and become a father!! love this story...can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: You said it. He's going to mess around too long and then its going to be too late. I'm glad you likey and thanx for the R&R!



DaniD (Signed) on Feb 10, 2008 03:17 am (Cheyenne)

OMG LuLu! I swear to you that I was just thinking about this story today. I was wishing for an update! lol Guess wishes can come true!

I read ALOT of different fan fiction, of all different types and I mean ALOT..I'm even attempting to author my first story in a different genera..Anyway my point is this...

This is currently THE best fan fic I am reading, and I'd say one of the best I have ever read. Enough said.

About this chapter..I adored it!..I love how strong you have made Kiki in this story.The fact she can put aside her bitterness enough not to take it out on the people that love Justin the most...that takes a strong person.

Loved the interaction between the families! I can't help but anticipate Justin realizing not only is he missing out on love and a beautiful daughter, but he is literaly on the outside looking in of his own family.

HIS family is having get togethers and cookouts, and it's now centered around the "Golden Child" and that child is not him! He has been dethroned by Cheyenne! HA...Take that Justin.. *snicker*  When he finally gets his head out of his ass..how oh how is he going to dig himself out??

Ok..Long winded review..but I want to encourage you keep going and hopefully inspiration will hit you again soon ;D

Dani



Author's Response: I know, the day before I posted I was looking at the word file for this chapter thinking that I had get it done because it had been too long since I last updated. Looks like my timing was perfect. LoL.rnrnNow on to Ms. Kiki - she was raised by a strong woman and mother, so she couldn't imaging being anything less. She's determined to stay positive especially seeing as she's going to be her daughter's only parent. She doesn't want her anger or the hurt that she still feels to get to Cheyenne. And part of that is letting Justin's family have access to Cheyenne, keeping them away would only hurt her in the long run and she's not about to hurt her own child. Cheyenne's the innocent one in all, she shouldn't have to pay for Justin's screw up and Kiki's doing what she has to, to protect her daughter. rnrnYou are so right about Justin and the distance that he's putting between himself and his own family by this choice his made and its is hurting him as much as abandoning his child is. He's burned some bridges that he's going to have to rebuild when he finally wakes the hell up. Don't worry about the long review, long/short doesn't matter to me, its still a great motivator. So thank you for the review, I'm working on the next two chapters already. :P



Tash2 (Signed) on Jan 14, 2008 12:44 am (The Wrath of Mama Lynn)
Oh my God i Love Josh him and reva so need to get it together but that's a different story. Justin needs a foot in his ass lunn should show him what it feels like being without his parents. He making it real hard to love him right now I goota go read a story where he not being an ashole. That's just how good yo story is.

Author's Response: Josh and Reva are one of the great soap couples....Anywhoo, Justin is a mess point blank and everything that could get him to cooperate had been done. The ball is in his court now. I'm glad you're enjoying the story and thank you for your review.



JoJo (Anonymous) on Jan 10, 2008 11:18 pm (The Wrath of Mama Lynn)
GO MAMA LYNN!! I get angrier and angrier with justin's character! i hope he comes to his senses soon! can't wait for the next update!

Author's Response: Lynn definitely gave it to him and Justin is not her little golden boy anymore. She's got the next extension of herself to care for especially in his absence. She'll never abandon her son, but he is not her only primary concern anymore.



DaniD (Signed) on Jan 10, 2008 12:02 pm (The Wrath of Mama Lynn)

All I can say is, "WOW!"  What a wonderful story! I read up until this last chapter, and I am blown away by your writing. You really know how to write angst.

After reading to this point, I'm so angry with Justin's character, I'm not sure if I want to see Kiki and him get back together. I mean what a typical deadbeat! Here Kiki is pregnant getting ready to raise another human being on her own...and Justin is just going about his merry way. Sure, when confronted he's ashamed..but he's really not getting it. He has a little pitty party, and then he just moves on along with his new girlfriend, and his party.  

I really hope that at some point this all hits him and he feels regret full throttle...and boy do I hope it's rubbed in his face! lol  See how your writing has got me all riled up? ;)

Can't wait to read more!



Author's Response: I'm glad my story's getting such a reaction out of you, it was supposed to. I, myself was pissed at Justin as I was writing the last chapter lol. And thanks for the compliment on my writing style because English was my least favorite subject and I sucked at it. I was afraid that I wasn't getting my point across clearly but your insight on Justin is dead on. He doesn't get it at all that he's still causing potential damage to his child by not being there at all. He's being very selfish and cowardly about his responsibilities as a father and his reasons are inexcusable. It's going to come back and bite him in the ass one day if he doesn't suck it up and be a man. Thanks for your review!



kahnechick85 (Signed) on Jan 09, 2008 07:24 pm (The Wrath of Mama Lynn)
I hope that Justin pulls his head out of his ass and fixes this. Its good that Lynn's not gonna be his informant. He needs to step up and take responisiblity. I love this and I can't wait to see what's gonna happen next. PMS.

Author's Response: Justin definitely needs some sense knocked into him. Lynn tried, but it didn't work so something's gonna have to give and eventually it will. "What goes around, comes around".....



lostinadreamx (Signed) on Jan 09, 2008 05:13 pm (The Wrath of Mama Lynn)

Okay… Lynn’s kind of a bitch. Lol. She has her son up on this high pedestal and she’d rather believe chickens are flying then Justin doing anything wrong. GRR! It’s aggravating! But atleast the truth FINALLY came out, and thank heavens that Lynn put Justin in his place. Poor Kiki.



Author's Response: Lynn is kind of in denial when it come to Justin. She knows he's no angel, but in the past she pretty much turned a blind eye to it. Now there's someone more important, a child, paying for his wrong doings. In this instance she's not going to stand by and ignore his less than favorable attributes. Oh and don't worry about Kiki - she's a survivor. I love reading your take on the storyline and the characters. Thank you so much for your constant support of my story. U rock! LoL :)



kahnechick85 (Signed) on Jan 01, 2008 02:37 pm (A Tour Souvenir Part II)
I really like this. I can't wait to see what's gonna happen next. PMS.

Author's Response: I'm glad you likey and thanks for reviewing :)



JustinsAngel (Signed) on Jan 01, 2008 12:50 pm (A Tour Souvenir Part II)
update soon... HAPPY NEW YEAR!

Author's Response: Happy New Years to you too! And thanks for the R&R!



lostinadreamx (Signed) on Dec 30, 2007 10:13 pm (A Tour Souvenir)
Ok.... SHES PREGNANT? I guess I must be a little slow cuz I didn't see that coming : lol but thats a good thing for you as a writer! a big twist. *sighs* i hope justin gets his shit together... okay on to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Yes Kiki is pregnant with a little Timberlake. It wasn't as much of a twist as it was a trick because I did leave clues. I was just being a little sneak and made them very subtle. Go back and see if you can find them. Feel free to email me if you think you figured it out right (that offer stands for anyone who wants to know). Here's a hint: Both clues are in Chapter 18.... Alast Justin is a special case. Like I said he's got some demons that have a tight hold on him and its going to take a very big rude awakening to get him on the straight and narrow. Thanks girl for the feedback.



a_moments_grace (Signed) on Dec 30, 2007 06:54 pm (A Tour Souvenir)
So I just had a chance to catch up on all your updates...and...whew!  Holy crap Girl! this is intense!...please tell me that you're going to make Justin grovel and make it up to Kiki...the two of them just have to be together.  It's not right if they're not!

Author's Response: I know I think those two crazy kids belong together too. Let's just hope that Justin can get his head straight so they can get back to each other.



JoJo (Anonymous) on Dec 30, 2007 06:07 pm (A Tour Souvenir Part II)
I'm not a big fan of justin right now...hopefully he wakes up and it's not too late. can't wait for the next update...this is one of my favorites.

Author's Response: Can't say I blame you. The choice that Justin's made it a crappy one and he's going to have face the consequences when they come back to slap him in the face. As far as the next update goes - well I'm not promising anything anymore cuz everytime I do it takes me a month to get it post. It took me less than that this time, I wanna keep it that same momentum going lol. Thanks for the review and favoritism lol.



watchoutforthecar (Signed) on Dec 30, 2007 03:17 pm (A Tour Souvenir Part II)
Ahh you fixed it! Good little ending. At least it wasn't a nail biting cliff hanger.

Author's Response: I don't know sometimes cliffies are good, but in this case I couldn't leave it there. I'm glad you're liking the story and thanks for both reviews!



watchoutforthecar (Signed) on Dec 30, 2007 02:52 pm (A Tour Souvenir)

Great chapter! Did it cut off though.. since there is a left over "The"?

 

 

Anyhoo, good job =] Love this story.  



Author's Response: Yes it did cut off. Damnit. Okay I'm going to go fix it and then you can read the rest. Thanks for the heads up!



Boo_Berry_Crunch (Signed) on Dec 30, 2007 02:33 pm (A Tour Souvenir)
Justin SHOULD feel horrible!! What he did to Kiki was fucked up.

Author's Response: Let's not forget about the baby. What he's done to both of them is jacked up. And he does feel bad about it actually. The chapter got cut off so I think you missed Justin's take on the whole situation. Read the next part and you'll see. Thanks for the review!





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